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04-04-07, 02:52 PM
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don't try.
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.Stare Death in the Face.
IP: A236 45B7
.Stare Death in the Face.
Yo.... Ages ago in midevil times when swords and blood were disperse A man that couldn't be killed ruled battlefields, his talent was his curse It gets worst, great warriors from afar came to witness this treasure As words spued from their throats he easily slit it with pleasure There was no measure to his force that reiked fury through souls day to day was the same slaughtering humans was his new goal A mere crusader shaped by ambitious peers over years with torment Showin no expressions n featured his kingdom like he was an endorsement He was free, when battling opponents beautifully killing was his art Genocide with a new meaning merely caused by pain of a heart Jus doin his part to survive, his blade was his code to exterminate Burned with hate he fought, attempts at his life he returned the fate One permiscous day during a confrontation a soldier stood his ground he had his shield raised as he acquired his stance, yelled PULL IT NOW unexpected gesture a volley of arrows darkened the sky like a cloud there firey trails pounded the target and left a smokey atmospheric shroud gasps from all around, astonished at the moment not a word was spoke unable to see the outcome the onlookers listened..they heard a choke everyone turned in hoped..through the ashes a man stood a part stoppin n staring..a figure punctured all over except for his heart with a foul swift of his arm he shattered the arrows that betrayed him they hit the ground in pieces, everyone were sure they had slain him a deceitful truth plagued there minds n every bit of doubt was lifted a man that can live through death, tragic rumors got around hes gifted even though he had been scarred, inhuman and godlike his hearts racin cuz he's the only mortal to look death in the eyes. ............and even he wouldn't face him............ Got bored, thought I would key a quick story for you.
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04-04-07, 03:12 PM
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don't try.
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IP: 28AD 5545
Here are my links.
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3155271 http://community.rapverse.com/showt...5274post3155274
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04-07-07, 02:31 AM
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IP: AC74 A441
this was a strong piece......... that rhyme scheme at tha start was simple but very effectively dope..... good expression and perspective...... itz like theres a war goin on or somethin' in there..... what a guy lol.. keep spittin
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04-08-07, 02:22 AM
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New to RV
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IP: 3F9E AEC0
eyy watup cuhz this shyt was good-i liked ur imagery and chice of words. i was feelin it
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04-08-07, 11:49 AM
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don't try.
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IP: 28AD 5545
Thanks for the feedback. Much appreciated.
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04-27-07, 12:28 AM
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IP: 0825 899A
Yea..haha this is how you got me into this shit..this is hot man. lol..I will drop an om and see how it compares to yours. everyone will wonder which cousin is better nig..I won't cop your style don't worry. biiiitchhhh. good multi's tho..n the story was coooooll, you watch to many fightin movies.
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top C krit.
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04-27-07, 08:38 AM
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IP: 26FC 8E94
this was real nice i like the story very creative....and the rhyme scheme went well with it....good work keep writing...~1~
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04-27-07, 02:30 PM
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Flyweight
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IP: 33E3 44D7
nice nice remind me of myself in ways...... I'll do a collab wit you man....
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