or if the songs forum is really active anymore soooo...

So Black's on some 1 minute intro thriller shit this time around.

STORY

Basically i've had several personas since i began rapping. Knight Sir Rebral, Merez, and Yanyeezy. I used to write alot back then and i came up with a bunch of dope ass punchlines and fragments. I never used them but didn't want to throw them away and found them coming up in alot of my new stuff even if it didn't really pertain to the song matter. In this song i called a meeting of all 3 personas to finish them once and for all. All my good lines, burn them all now in the...


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pag...m?bandID=303064

The intro, sadly, took me like 2 hours find effects, put together, and weave properly into the song so...

Don't Sleep.

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Intro: pretty dope. The breathing monster was pretty sick...only thing i didn't enjoy was how long it was.

Quailty: Pretty good, you voice would drown out every now and then

Lyrics: You rap really fast, so it was pretty hard to hear all the punchlines and set ups.

Overal: You did a good job flowing over the beat, sounded pretty good..only thing was that it was just like a rush of bars with no hook.

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that Sigma song...that shit is ill dude. The beat is fucking sick as hell....that song is just dope all 'round

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My favorite persona was Knight cause he came in on "Doom Train" That's a really good book if you get a chance about a train that comes for you when you die. No matter where you are, it'll get you. Ghost train goes through walls stops and silences on a dime in a second.

It was sposed to be a rush cause i'm just trying to get rid of all the bars I didn't get to use when i was 14 and 15. Dope shit though for a kid though right.

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Word.....intro was hot man, but it kinda dragged on for a little too long in my opinion. I almost got bored waiting for you to start spitting.

I think you might could use a little work on your delivery and it would have set this off man. You sound like you're trying too hard to get the flow right that you sounded like you were bored when you were spitting.

My favorite line though was "I can dumb down to my audience, still dumbfound my audience...."

I was typing as I was listening though, so I might have missed a good one or two


Good shit overall though man



And what happened to "Rush The Crowd"?

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Still waitin on nynth's gay ass to finish his verse believe it or not.

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