yo yo check
it's true my hits never stead on the shelf, and never waited for help,//
came out of no where like i created ma self,//
in karate got cats afriad of blefts,//
i'm the hotest with spits, bombing ma hits,//
dropping bombs(hits) deeper then a bottomless pit,//
belive me this is not a trick, hoter then sick,//
kick shit, i'm out of my wits,//
just hot trained not insane to remain on top of the game,//
cause i'm just that nameless vet that anit famous yet,//
but i came ta get this whole game in check,//
so i'm staying the prince in the game of the wimps,//
saying you a pimp and only aiming for blimps,//( fat girls)
attacking the street, while i'm packing the heat,//
i'm not a monsters just an animal trapped in a beast,//
f with this f with this, if you think you got a chance to dance with your devilous messages,//
so don't said my name in vien respect it cause saying it will get you a death wish,//
got cats leaviing a call, you lucky if you even breathing at all,//
so play dead unless you got a decent reason to fall,//

peace!
just a keystyle but i'm goin use it for a song

TELL ME IF THIS IS SONG MATERIAL WHEN YOUR PEEPING THIS

O AND THIS IS COPY RIGHTED BY ME SO IF YOU BIT YOUR IN TROUBLE.

TELL ME WHICH LINES I SHOULD USE IN A SONG

damn, another open mic piece with a played out topic and elelmentary vocab.

up the originality coz thats 50% of illness and make your rhymes more complex by including some kind of imagery, or more sophisticated vocab or maybe a few more multis'

so i'm staying the prince in the game of the wimps,//
saying you a pimp and only aiming for blimps,//

^^like that

this was a nice flow, but that was about it...it was your basic unoriginal topic, "im the illest" blah blah blah

it was well written, it flowed really well so props on that but its just nothing jaw dropping cause it is the same as every other dudes.....if you gon drop pieces like this you at least needs some stand out punchlines to keep interest

uppin for peeps tell me what in there i can use in a rap song

uppin

i know but i've seen royce 5'9 and onther rappers rap with this stye and this is the one i like uppin

i like the style, sorry to say but mines the same, but a little different. like the wordplay, elivate and stay up. peep my ish. holla

nice one
peace

hey i liked that son. i like royce's shit also. sometimes people in this sight might not like shit like this only cause they like reading those big words that niggaz dont know the definition to naw mean. just keep doin what u doin. to tell you the truth you should do audio. cause the same niggaz dissin you well be the same one saying " oh that shit was tight" if they hear it