im not sure if this is much good or not, but tell me what ya think:

the end of my gun, is gettin cold against my ear, while my mind is in panic, over-run by fear, that ill never see the light of the next day again, in the meantime, remindin myself not to bend, my head when i pull the triger, of coarse i will die, so here i go "CLICK" damn, no bullets inside.

i no its kinda short, but thats only one of many. so, tell me what u think?