Iight check in i'll go first.
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aight, drop

Ayo...

I'll dislocate your sholder blade from the entire body, puttin me in the hall of fame for disses, next to 50 cent versus irv gotti//
Snotty nosed kid tryin to build up a first impression, sit down and learn a lesson how to pin point your aggression//
Obviously stressin after only reading one line of my session, go make a confession up above and vote the answer to the question//
Your eyes light up burning with a desire for a quick death, so i lyrically take your breathe and slit your last main vein left//
Severed everything with a fine cut like a butcher does meat, your surrounded by defeat sweatin from loaded heat spittin flesh eatin ink//
Confidence sinks, depression on the virge to errupt rapidly, thinkin drastically " why dizzy d keep happily attacking me"//
Now darkness over rules you subdued to no love or virtue, i guess there was too few, positive influences to look to//
My verbal nature will have you disturbly awakend and silent, now corrupted of pleasant imagery thoughts they turned to violent//
You start to feel like a fire hydrant, havin compressed out-bursts, even worse you have a thirst for hoses first, your cursed//
Ending up cremated, inflated in a baloon crossing over the Atlantic, your mom can say it was your religion mixed with chinese and hispanic//

yo im in school. then i gotta work till 6, ill drop when i get home, peace

iight mane, you've had enuff time. Hurry up.
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ive had enuff time, correct me if im wrong, but it took you 2 days to drop, so you can wait, cause i gotta eat dinner, so ill drop after that

Damn man your rap is scary, in a class with a ghost and a Goblin
Some of your lines is so whack, people be yellin HOUSTON WE HAVE A PROBLEM
Somethin isn't right here, is there a problem with your vision or somethin
Are you blind, crosseyed, you got a lazy eye or somethin
Somethin must be wrong, vour vision has gotta be impared
Because if you could see straight, youd see your rhymes and even you would be scared
You'd start Screamin HELP, like your drowin and shit
And then your nieghbor would run in your house, see your rhymes and just start frownin and shit
Even your girl would come out, see your rhymes and she'd dump you
But this must of happened b4, cause shes with me now and were gonna fuck too
You take 2 days to write your rhymes and then you act like they're fresh
You act like a playa in this game, but the only game that you be playin is chess
And people always used to think the Rodney King beating was bad
But when they see this beating that DIZZY D just got everyone's gonna be sad

uppin^^^

uppin 4 votes

yo dis goes 2 Dizzy D. dis man may take long 2 right shit but styll hiz punchlinez r grimy, dis wuz da 1 dat took it: 'i'll dislocate your sholderblade from the entire body, puttin me in the hall of fame for disses next to 50 cent vs. Irv Gotti'

^^^^uppin

dizzy d did it

come on hurry up so i can spit my shit

^^

poll vote - Dizzy D

better verse, kept the same structure throughout too