RapVerse.com Community
 Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End RV Radio  

Go Back   RapVerse.com Community > Fresh From The Lab > Textual Releases
User Name
Password
FAQ Calendar Search Today's Posts Mark Forums Read

Reply
 
Thread Tools Search this Thread Display Modes
Old 03-04-03, 08:54 AM   #1
DenZe
Registered User
 
Posts: 11
Joined: Jul 2002
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
Contemplating With A Gun.......And Life

IP: 7D3B 2990

on the edge...contemplating with a gun...defining death...
block out all the actions around me...become purposely deaf...
pondering...extracting bad thoughs from my mind...
i want to be known as happy...if i finally decide to die...
the gun shakes...as if it really wants to be used...
My life isnt worth living...been brutally abused...
fine physically...but mentally...i'm bruised...
...i dont want continue...
i want to die...holdin back tears...even though i'm alone...
...i feel i'll look silly if i cry...
on the edge...contemplating with a gun...defining death...
block out all the actions around me...become purposely deaf...
...i realize...somehow this world isnt right...
no one ever has a happy life...'all been through some kind of strife...
...hurt in some way...tears or blood shed...
...always something painful has to be said...
pondering...extracting bad thoughs from my mind...
i want to be known as happy...if i finally decide to die...
  Reply With Quote
Old 03-04-03, 09:14 AM   #2
Flex Havana
Guest
 
Posts: n/a
Joined:
Status:
Text Record: 0-1
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 9E97 00AB

Cold shyt kid....Makes U feel like your in your "mind" and seeing thru your eyes......Good flow and I like how U wrote it in blurbs instead of regular lyrics
  Reply With Quote
Old 03-05-03, 01:06 AM   #3
inspire
.-.Marxism.-.
 
inspire's Avatar
 
Posts: 1,603
Joined: Mar 2003
From: Lexington
Status: Offline
Text Record: 13-3
Audio Record: 1-1
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 61AB A3EA

ill... i liked this piece... death is a complicated subject, you made it look like pre-school work... keep rhymin
Send a message via MSN to inspire Send a message via Yahoo to inspire   Reply With Quote
Old 03-05-03, 01:38 AM   #4
Rubix
Guest
 
Posts: n/a
Joined:
Status:
Text Record: 0-1
Audio Record: 0-0
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: 6387 1717

thats sick, kinda depressing......but like flex said it gets you kinda thinking from your point of view in a way.....keep it up
  Reply With Quote
Old 03-05-03, 10:03 AM   #5
DenZe
Registered User
 
Posts: 11
Joined: Jul 2002
Status: Offline
Text Record: 0-0
IP: 7D3B 2990

UP
  Reply With Quote
Old 03-05-03, 11:49 AM   #6
BlUnT-MC
Got More Meds Than Pfizer
 
BlUnT-MC's Avatar
 
Posts: 2,637
Joined: Nov 2002
From: ScarBorouGh
Status: Offline
Text Record: 25-38
Audio Record: 11-10
Graphics Record: 0-0
IP: A175 060F

it was a tight piece.. stayed with topic.. only suggestion is you shouldn't have a hook in such a short spit..
"on the edge...contemplating with a gun...defining death...
block out all the actions around me...become purposely deaf..."

it was a'ight but wears thin... uppin'
__________________
Authentik Intelligence
Send a message via AIM to BlUnT-MC   Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools Search this Thread
Search this Thread:

Advanced Search
Display Modes

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump



All times are GMT -4. The time now is 10:40 PM.

Powered by vBulletin.
Copyright © 2000-2004 Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.