yo, give em feedback, I need to know if this is recording worthy.... time is money when you're payin' studio rates..

--CHORUS--
I'm a killer with a heart of gold.//
a serial rapist, with a condom on.//
a una-bomber that gets the children out.//
I'm everything you'd expect and a l'il you don't.//

I'm a criminal... so, does that really effect your thoughts of me.//
hey you dropped something, I didn't have to tell you.//
I could've took it for myself, but I gave it back, what does that say about.//
the type of person I am, if you hadn't been told of my past.//
you wouldn't know that I ever have robbed cheated or stole.//
stabbed, sold weed, or snorted coke, it was me who let you know.//
just so you could watch your back, I gave you a heads up,//
and you still think I'm all bad.//
I'll bet you're little mr.perfect yourself.//
when you was a kid you never took a candy off the shelf.//
put it in your mouth, I highly doubt it.//
we all got a l'il bit of criminal inside us.//
it's just that some of us don't try and hide it.//

murder I wrote, like angela lansbury, only harrier and with a dick.//
I don't solve the capers, I just commit.//
myself to what I'm doing 'till it's FINISHED.//
morals dimished along-with my concience.//
but I'm still an honest man, and I will not stand.//
for being type-cast as the epidimy of evil.//
like it's me who's piercing the world with this needle.//
and injecting the people with a disease worse than ebola.//
the plague and aids all mixed in together.//
there's way worse than me in the world, they just dodn't have a record.//
to get their thoughts across, and drop ya jaws.//
so stop the oos aaww's, If you don't like what you're hearin' just turn it off.//

so what exactally were you expecting to get outta this.//
some words of wisdom to enlighten your head.//
yeah right not in my life time, not in any verses that I rhyme.//
I'm try'n to make you see that we need to stop judging people by their rep.//
try'n to let the hardest fucker get a l'il respect.//
not just looked at like, --mothers voice-- honey, stay away from that man, he's bad.--end--//
why don't you give everybody an equal chance and opportunity.//
stop the criticism, we can all live together in unity.//
who could speak, out against that.//
unless you're a nazi, but then you should be dead.//
three rounds out of my clip in your head, hile.//
ummmm...yeah...

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=31962 http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=32033

uppin' on this shit yo... someone fuckin' respond..

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posted b4 site went down.. uppin' 4 reply..

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Maybe i have to hear it to appreciate it more. But on text the flow looked messed up and some of it didnt appear to even rhyme. I dont know, maybe on audio it would be better.

it really is.. I'm-a post it soon.. almost done recordin'..

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Yo I could agree with my man Rich, the flow is a bit off, a bit of it didn't rhyme, but the content was bad at all, the shit ain't simplistic like alot of post I've been hearing thas good, and Yo I really liked the hook, that shit was tight...

Peace

serious.. The hook was my fav part too.... b sure 2 check it on audio... it'll be up some time 2 nite or 2morrow... uppin'... it does rhyme and flow 4 the most part, just gotta hear it...

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yo flow wuz aight but alot of bars didn't rhyme at all. i thought it wuz only me seeing it but probably da audio might sound better than i think. i'm a check it out fo sho'.

uppin' since peeps getin' confused with the link in the other thread

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