i still cant get it out, my heart and my brain have a shouting bout,
one says chase, the other says stay, but both are the wrong way,
chase the dove only to make her fly faster, feel like legs caught in plaster,
stay only to let her drift away, i wish i hadnt stopped to talk to her that day,
one year later and im still rhymin, wish she made me hate her, wish she was two-timing,
but she was pure and deep as the ocean, in my heart she caused much commotion,
without her i'd be six feet deep, this wall of love i cant leap,
shes still out there flying around, i hope she never gets found,
for that to happen would be the ultimate end, nothing could heal me, not the paper or the pen,
for her to get married and have lots of kids, i'd probably end up like kurt cobain did,
i learned to hide my feelings so shes cool, little does she know im a lovestruck fool,
the day i forget about her is when i stop caring, in the mirror i cant stand staring,
i dont like the person looking back, but hes not there so i cant attack,
still stumbling around staring at the stars, inspire, drowning this love at the bar...

very nice, kinda poetry but i feel the flow, was it intended for somebody? cuz it seems u just went through some drama and wrote it out frum ya heart......

again, very nice......

word^^ soundz like heart-breakin jus happened.Dont stress it,as far as ya verse it wuz pretty decent.Stay ^
-Avi

yeah it was intended for someone... every one of the love rhymes i've posted on here was for her... thanks for the comments... keep rhymin

dude, all the shit you posts is of the charts and this is one more totally ill piece.....and like dragon said it seems like you really wrote this from the heart, keep it up. peace