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03-09-03, 03:02 AM
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the turn around...
IP: 4CE1 3F90
only the beggining....
awoken by the akward silence lying in a pit of fragments... my skins ashes drown me and my body is hot like acid... the ground is a sea of glasses and as my blood drips it clashes... pouring from the gashes i think back to my casket... the day i lied in center stage and everyone took notice... emotions now spoken i saw my families hearts broken... and i was solemnly hopin that one day we would meet... all is sweet as we would walk on heavens golden streets... paying no mind to the disease that we have unlearned... how could a christian be so holy but still watch one burn... these thoughts filled my head after i died and began ascendin... lifes evils remembered the last thing i wanted was heaven... to be def. continued soon..
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03-09-03, 04:26 PM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
It's a good piece man.It's a good start and you know you come
better now.Just make sure every line rhymes at the end and you be straight.Overall I give this 7.5/10.Keep on shinning playa.One. |
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03-09-03, 10:02 PM
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IP: 6387 1717
that is a tight verse dude, makes me sad though......way to good to get slept on like this
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