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Old 03-19-03, 08:56 PM   #1
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Art of War

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I walk among the masses like I'm one of the majority/
Waiting to reveal my supremecy and have all adoring me/
Hearts race pumping adrenaline with each motion of my lips/
Words inducing dramatic reactions with my verbal apocalypse/
No mercy and no friends used as a motto when I come to conquer/
Burning down cities, toppling skyscrapers doing the opposite of proper/
Declared to be a lyrical miracle a new religion begins to form/
Followers travel in my wake to witness my empire as it's born/
Dominate with force and no remorse is my Art of War/


short but the collab never happened so I'm just posting my part for some critism...

enjoy
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Old 03-19-03, 09:05 PM   #2
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I walk among the masses like I'm one of the majority/
Waiting to reveal my supremecy and have all adoring me/
Hearts race pumping adrenaline with each motion of my lips/
Words inducing dramatic reactions with my verbal apocalypse/

that was madd nice mayne.
keep elivating an comin with flames.
altho short it was well put together
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Old 03-19-03, 09:07 PM   #3
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yeah manzolio... this was AIIGHT... could of been worse, naw... um... nice wordage to get your point across... kinda wonderin' what the whole ish was gonna be like but oh well... nice vibes D

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Old 03-20-03, 02:20 AM   #4
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The original Art of War is a thick book...
Nice rhyme scheme though. Keep on!
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Old 03-20-03, 08:26 AM   #5
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This was mad short....U coulda got at me on this I woulda did a lil sumthin to add on to it....But this was nice....Keep it up D....Peace
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Old 03-20-03, 08:39 PM   #6
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Short, but sweet....

Liked the content, the meaning, and the...wel....everything..

Nice shit..

P.e.a.c.e.
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Old 03-21-03, 07:00 PM   #7
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I might as well up this to see if I can get some more critism...

pz
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Old 03-21-03, 11:26 PM   #8
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Ever read Sun Tzu's book on the Art of War?

Anyway, this was more like a rap song than poetry. But that's good, because especially for rap this was some ill shit.

~Shalom~
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