you'll wither and fall upon the devil you'll call........

my chasity //contains you insanity //for the right to be //in love with creativity// I bow to the greats and nod to the impressed//I put all my levels on the floor and put you to the test//I'm blessed with wings that were torn from hatred// I was brought by evil to pursue the outdated// I comply with the three kings and heavens arc//I bleed from greed and your local narc// I conseal majestic wishes and let your dreams come true// The evil wonders why your payments due// You owe him something for all the treasures you recieve// failure to pay will cause you to greive//I change reality's//within moralitys//and cross the seven seas//with the deadly trees//I control the winds that blow your homes down//I control the pain that seeks no sound//I blend in with your hatred as jealousy turns green//all the angels above me agree I'm mean//I play the bitch because know one else will// It takes a strong person to be able to kill// that is my story that is my life//I have a bigger heart because I'm willing to make the bigger sacrafise.

damn sure does feel good to be ignored ... ^^uppin^^

this was aight...need to work on structure of your verse...but vocab, and wordplay was deascent...

6/10

Stay spittin...

P.e.a.c.e.

thanks for the reply

put it into bar form... makes it easier to read... unlike 13th i would have to give this a higher score of 7.5/10... keep rhymin

ty ^ love them critics.. helps me grow

AngelicSheShe, understanding is a beautiful heart that bears fruit like a peach tree, sweet....
Some take one and make out of it a wonderful peach cobbler....
Some leave it to drop and rot for fodder.
It's true all that glitters is not gold....
Words are only as good as the cards you hold...some win, some bluff, and some fold. Keep on !

I ain't even got to see you to konw that you blessed
I wanna take you by the wings and fly away from this mess
You an angel to me and i can't understand that
Torn two different ways like Romeo and Juliet
But i do know you should be with me
I got a cold heart and you're the warmth i need
I prayed and i know you gotta answer my prayers
Just to know that you love me if nobody else cares
So I leave you with a kiss-it's yours-you can take it
I'll offer my heart if you promise not to break it

*wipes a tear away* how adorable..

^^^^^

this was good...


keep droppin girl

my favorite line..
//I play the bitch because know one else will// It takes a strong person to be able to kill//

ty

I control the winds that blow your homes down//I control the pain that seeks no sound

that was my fav line, powerful shit
I agree w/the others tho
it is kinda hard to read, but is a good drop outside of format

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