My morning starts to shine with teardrops in my eyes
And here i am alone startin to realize
that my days would be brighter , if i could learn to hide
thiz feelin that i hav for you , keep hurtin me inside

Then my day begins with simple of thoughts of you
HOpin that tomorrow would be me and you
Sharin' dreams with each other and makin them come true
Holding one another sayin, "All I need is you"

But will you say that you love me, show me that you care
Say when i need you, you would always be there
But if you go and leave me, and this i swear is true
my love will always be with you

now my night would end with just one wish thats YOU
to hold me in the dark and help me make it through
cuz the pain thats inside me is simply melt away
If i have you hear with me and promise me youd stay

But all these things are way out of my hand's reach
eventhough how hard a try ..kept fallin down d' bleech
all i have is a dream of us tonight
And just be glad that u have been a part of my life

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<br><br><center>- Shiznit -
- Tampons are still expensive -
- That's a Fact - </center>

I LUV YOU...............lol ok i said...now leave me alone...u staker..lol jokin

ANywayz nice poem felt the emotions.....had the flow...nice contend peep mine

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simple, flowing yet so to the point...using some real nice imagery to makes it depiction even better...

...liked how you used the structure too, people usually get confused and mess it up when using such a structure...

... waffle sandwiches (formely respect)...

lookin good on d replies so far....thanks y'all...uppin

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<br><br><center>- Shiznit -
- Tampons are still expensive -
- That's a Fact - </center>

eyo kid, yo shyt was tyte..felt all what you said--emotions felt and everything...keep on what your doing...

emotion is what you make it

good post man, im feelin all yo emotions, that shit was tight

likin whut I see so far this is real coo I likes whut ya bringin to the table daddi keep doin this. The piece was really nice I digged it a lot ^^^^
*~Holler~*

I thought the vocab was simple but the ideas overpowered that... you're pretty good. I'm goin through some ish right now that really relates to this so I was most def feelin this, I liked it, keep it commin peace

way to express your feelings keep flowing