a little verse i wrote with alot of things on my mind.When i went to sleep asking for a solution i had a dream,and turned that dream into this verse


I remember the first time i spoke to God face to face...
My heart was skipping a beat as it accelerated twice the normal rate...
knees went weak,eyes were blinded from the holy sight...
said he had a message for me,as he touched my glowing with light...
fell to my knees,cried as i begged for some direction...
i need your help lord,my only soul needs ressurection...
i'm in so much pain God,please just take it away...
let me rest in peace free from the struggles of a day...
he touched my shoulder and said stand up my son...
great things will come for you,your work is not done...
i asked him if i was worthy to do his bidding...
he told me,if its in your heart then its fitting...
that you shall do my bidding,and help save my children...
make mothers from women and fathers from men...
i spoke and asked is that all,my father u want me to do...
he said no,but the rest will come when the times due...
i hung my head low,as a tear fell from my eye...
he gazed at me and said i know why you cry...
don't worry your grandmother will always love you...
every night she asks me to look after you and your brother too...
i said thank you lord and the task you have for me will be done...
as he departed he smiled and said i will check on you my son...




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no offence but im not a fan of christian rap but im sure ud get the gig like if u tried. disregarding the subject it was quite nice. simple flow wit sum good but simple rhyme patterns. ya vocab was a little off tho. anyway check mine shinobi life return the favour cuz

lol
i ain't no chirstian rapper dawg
but i do believe in god
lol i got a peice called vision of hell i
'll put it up sooner or lata


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Good, if you believe in God then check out (in the search part of tha Open Mic forum), Screens or Air Supremacy and Air Supremacy too...Just type in tha key words *screens* and *supremacy* and they'll come up. Parts of a map of understanding on how to get to God...otherwise, this piece was good but It stumbles against my beliefs a bit...keep droppin'

ok, an original concept but not exactly creative in what you were saying, vocab was plain, imagery was basic.

keep elavating.

thanx 4 the replies