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flow when i was bored
IP: 4577 CD9A
a lot of people say live life on the edge
but if we slip up parents'll rip off ya heads fuck that shit this my life, Imma live it accomplish a new fete everday and go to the limit i dont like wasting my time not even a lil bit sex is a race and imma win it I'm in sex just for the finish, not the girls sensations whether it takes me 10 minutes or an hour for an ejaculation most girls arent worth the effort and force dont let em in the house, they get fucked on the porch make em sound like a dolphin, naah like a horse stick it in their ass "pull the sneaky pete?", of course it just slides in they don't quite know what to do except take in right, and scream out "I love you" yes its true, girls i got a few, riding wit a new one everytime i swing through fucked every girl in all my schools crews got more fuckin honey then Winnie The Pooh time to change the subject of this nice little flow to stealin ya shit, no longer fuckin ya hoe leave ya car unlocked with keys in the ignition imma walkin right by.. what a profitable position come back by, to find your car's missin left your phone in the car, stand in the street just flippin go home to find your house robbed and phone ringin pick it up.. and hear your favorite artist's voice singin as i talk on the phone drinkin ya buse as its spinning with ya shit in my house just perfectly fit in might get caught as the cops bust in, but this flows endin, ain't been caught yet, or my court case is pending or under survelience and police investigation |
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IP: C3D0 66BD
aight dunny i dont mean to criticise but i got to...you switched topics like 2 or 3 times in this rhyme, try to stay focused on one subject...try to make yor bars more longer and shit...plus work on your wordplay and rhyme scheme and shit nahmean...shit was aight but to tell you the truth i think you could have done better...anyways keep spittin shit dunny...one
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IP: 4577 CD9A
I don't even think about bar length anymore unless it's like two-line bars or three words. Because people will ride your ass out for being too long. "I got lost"
I don't agree with that idea. If you toss some multiple rhymes in the lines they flow quick anyways. The piece was... average... you could tell you weren't really trying to get too serious about stuff. Keep working, you'll be all right. |
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IP: 4577 CD9A
i was just jotting as i was bored.. see the title i got better ones on here
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IP: CF4C 1E38
silly
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IP: 5153 3B92
Gstance i aintseen any ur shit on here u got 8 posts man dont critices till u realize that u need to recognize, when u open ya eyes and see that the fuckin title sed i was bored maybe ullgetit man
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