Tha path I follow is lit with Superior Knowledge...
any other paths just swallow you in it's hollow depths of college...
Grads...who teach you how to write, experiment with science and math... an' how to debate philosophy with a pen and a pad...
But nothing about life and what we're here for...
The best of scholars still stand outside tha door...
of Knowledge looking through tha keyhole...
Any question I ask you, Tha answer I can add to...
an' lace you with a barrage of questions that have you...
lookin' dumb, answering ummm...unable to see whole...
You half wisdom dimwits get lost in ya own room when it's dimlit...
While you struggle to make tha point...I just spin it...
Sun, I spit one just to shine above you this time...
Your skills more inclined to have my boots just to spit shine...
I know I rhymed tha same word twice...but tha point is nice...
You wouldn't know golden vocabulary if it was iced...
I shine...ooopps there I said it thrice...
Now cook it with beans and rice and digest tha light...
Superior Knowledge stops at vain talk...
Tha paths we walk aint outlined chalk...it's full of reeds and stalks...
Some believe that weeds help 'em seeee like hawks...
Would you believe they balk when I enter the room and stalk...
Looking for the most ferocious MC...to tear him down subliminally...then literize it literally...only to haunt his thoughts forever remembering me...
Ya'll blasted cats need to go back to school...
Tha new world order has a new rule...Knowledge is an ocean an' you can't swim, go back to pools.

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Man ya'll sleepin or what?

this was cool... you got some deep lines... too many to paste... i'm looking forward to seeing your poet tourney entry... keep rhymin

This was aight....A few good nice linez....But there was a bit of repitition....A few pointless lines....But sum nice ones too....Keep elevatin'....Peace

Thanx MeNTiLL,
Pointless linez? Just a set up for tha punches...but critique considered. Wished you had rated it though so I know where your mind's at on this one. I have an abstract flow that is difficult to digest sometimes. It's like I only know how it's said. I wish I had audio capabilities...it'd erase all tha doubt. Be tha best or be out...

yea. shit was pretty nice.. I thought the flow could use a bit of fine tuning in some places, it seemed choppy.. the vocab is a'ight.. you're white aren't you, I think you got a white style anyway.. but yeah, shit's pretty tight...

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Blunt, What is a white rhyme style? LOL...sshhhh, Don't call me out though. My covers Blown. Oh well, guess I should hang it up an run a hotel...Thanx, dog but it's hard to digest people's flow unless you hear it. That's why I don't criticize somebod's textual flow unless it's insanely off. Thanx, for the critique...an' stop exercising that mind of yours it's dangerous...

lol white style?? bet ya 30% the heads on ere white. nah as for the piece it was nice but if its abstract u should put a beat behind it cos i cant imagine broken beats in my head. it had sum nice lines tho and ya topics played (the last half anyway) but ya handled it well 7.5/10

Dope creativity with the word being said three times, but man, it does sound nice...

mad props in da vocab.

Thanx kmfrob and KRISSKASS,
I peeped ya'lls stuff an' I like it. Skills recognize Skills...Keep bringin' it. The year of tha wack MC is over....peace

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well you know by now you got nice lines and great vocab.. but you know.. I agree with the meaning.. people have there priorities all screwed up these days.. they'd rather go get high than study or work hard at there proffesion... nice work OoNnEe

As always, Thanx Angelic! Some people don't think that deep, Good lookin'.

Well, this piece was good in some places but in other spots it seems like you couldnt find tha words to say. Ok vocab, nice wordplay, creativity was ok, and your descriptiveness is ok could use some elevatin. overall a 7/10
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