you can call my crew dangerous
best belive half you fools cant hang with us
dont even diserve to breath the same air as us
you know my rhymes are glorious
cuz i learnd from the notorious
yeah the B.I.G.
listening to him help me become an emcee
and when im done spitten my rhyme
I got little bitches trying to end my time
but I tear threw them like their nothing but a reject
dont even have to use a deadly object
I got a trigga but I aint never had to pull it
never had to penatrate some one with a bullet
so if you got beef thats hella deep
mutha fucka cool it
or you will be put to sleep

that shit was aight, some things off a little but i do that to, the last part was good, like the line "i got a trigga but i aint never had to pull it, never had 2 penetrate some one with a bullet," shit was good, keep writtin, well i gots 2 run, peace eazy

hahahahahhahhaha............shit was tight?????????.......sounds like this shit was written by lil romeo and shit..............Demo?......what label u tryin to work wit.....The Mickey Mouse Club?.........elevate mad if u expect for ya Demo to make it past the dumpsters outside a labels office

you want to talk shit bitch go a head just cuz you aint got nouthing on this bitch

HAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAAHHAHAHHAHAHAH.......... .KID YA WACK REALIZE IT.....DEAL WIT IT.........THEN HELP YA SELF OUT AND QUIT BEFORE U GET EMBARASSED WIT THESE BULLSHIT ASS RHYMES

you think your a big bad ass or what?
how bout a battle?

Hey yo Rhyme was wack an don't be challenging McDarreal
cos you aint shit he'll fuck you up

a yo senic i think we should bust on this mc darreal faggot,

ok kids lets take ten deep breaths

1....2....3...4..5....6....7...8...9...10

ok maybe Mic Dareall came a lil too hard on u
but the last thing u wanna go do is start some shit
w/him, cuz it wont be pretty... for u guys
u have to be able to listen to get better
ur shit has very basic on all levels
and thats ok, we are start somewhere
u need to be able to keep a cool head
if ur ever gonna get better
just some advice

the rhyme was pretty simple...i liked the last half of it
but the mistakes your making....i still make those mistakes so dont fret

^^