A true element of tha street never needs your critique...
He stays solid like concrete beneath your feet, completely...
unfazed by your ability to throw your trash an' walk on...
when cement is wet it's impressionable...but dry, it's solidity is never Questionable...so what you express to me is a meager wisdom you shouldn't talk on...
You didn't have your hands on this man when he bagan with his plan...
you weren't there to advise how to take tha prize or excape demise...
I'd understand if you were my teacher, but when I was a concreter...you had diapers and mom beat cha'...so now you overstretched your arms to catch a cheetah...
While Micheal Jordan was figurin' how many ways he could put a ball in a basket...I was figurin' how many ways I could put an MC in a casket...
While you wonder how these long lines can fit inside some beats...that's a secret I'mal keep...
until I have 40 students unleashed in tha streets...or 'til I'm six feet deep...'cause everyday tha mode of death is on creep...
but what is certain, no MC that's hiding behind a curtain, puttin' garbage work in...could ever take me if I was burpin'...
You want me to come down to your level...when I passed that when I was twelve...you don't know tha difference between tha brake and gas pedal...so you can't drive arguements into the topics I delve...
you besta keep your comments to yourself, otherwise it'll be bad for your health...and out a job, it'll make problems for your wealth...
tha journey to tha depths of hell, could be a shorter trip, as well...the only difference will be how hard you fell!!!

your critiques actually show me your weak, unless your on tha level I speak...because:

My worst approach is...better than you cockroaches...
even if I sneeze an' don't cover my nose.
If I only breathe heavy, you'll know who tha coach is...
an' I suppose, you'll never be ready for pros...
with minimum prose...I never fully display my flows

ya'll just don't know how I draw tha linez...and if you don't know just say you don't know...instead of opening your mouth, and saying something while acting like a scholar...embarassing yourself.

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good vocab, the only bit i didnt like was the diaper bit, btu except fo that it was alrite, and whats up with
"My worst approach is...better than you cockroaches...
even if I sneeze an' don't cover my nose.
If I only breathe heavy, you'll know who tha coach is...
an' I suppose, you'll never be ready for pros...
with minimum prose...I never fully display my flows"

reading this remined me of chino XL, it was good but some of it didnt make since like the over streched your are to catch a cheeta? what is that suposed to mean was it just a filler cause you couldnt think of anything else?

overall it was nice with the exception of a few part.

now go check out mine and leave some feedback

Thanx, Mykand tRill, but certainly a cheetah can run faster than a man which only means he's uncatchable by man...just like my linez sometime...you didn't understand it because maybe it was written for you...if you look deep into the meaning and analize each line with your brain you'd grasp a higher knowledge. Some people no matter how hard they try(like overstretched arms) they just don't get it. That was my point to this joint...you cannot possibly critique what you don't understand...when you come to a master and don't understand a knowledge you have to come humblely to gain benifit from that knowledge, otherwise you remain ignorant...I'mal peep you all...no doubt...but I came in here a heavy weight, been taking out MC's since 1989, I think if you want someone to critique your work I am more qualified than these 16 year olds that just heard rap yesterday...but few of you are qualified to critique mine... and this piece is proof...Imagine when I wrote (tha paths we choose) I had to bring my style down Ten levels just for people's comprehension...someone told me I should elevate more( an this person was an average writer)...so now I drop this and you see I lost two people... I tell you the people who have knowledge and the people who don't have knowledge are not the same...peace to all those trying to elevate...Oh and any linez ya'll don't like must pertain to you...

"My worst approach is...better than you cockroaches...
even if I sneeze an' don't cover my nose.
If I only breathe heavy, you'll know who tha coach is...
an' I suppose, you'll never be ready for pros...
with minimum prose...I never fully display my flows"

Oh I forgot, to me this is self explanitory, but to those who need explanations...My worst rhyme is better than tha best of yours...even if I only Sneeze on tha mic or breathe heavy or burp, you could never beat me no matter how hard you try. I know this bacause I'm a coach, your a player...play with or againgst other players...but coaches don't play...the minimum that I have to say is more than effective for your wack speech but it doesn't display the superior beauty of my style...on this topic I could write a thesis, but here is a summery...I told ya'll in (tha paths...) that most of ya'll need to go back to school...keep it movin'...

Man your shits intense... I feel where ya coming from...I like da way you think...
You got ya shit tight....And well made...

Keep flowing that.....Looking up to ya lillem

umm.. intresting.. seemed to be more of a poem than a flow.. maybe thats wut its suppose ta be.. but it still got good text either way.. stay up

I have an off-beat spoken word style cadance that sometimes loses people in text, but it flows well to beats...if I had tha audio capabilities you could see/hear better, anyways, Thanx for the upps...peace.

its kinda tough to follow in text
but Im not doubting at all that it would be a bad ass audio
I really like ur style its sorta quirky and ecentric
its definately not like anything most people are postin here

Thanx 12, keep puttin' inwork like your last one and you'llrise above heads...peace.

12? buurppp!

good drop son, ur shit was intense the style is easy to follow, but the statements rnt, i can tell that wasent prewrite, cuz if you had time to think about it, that sit woulda made more sense first 1/4 soli grea shit, 2/4 varied 3/4 eh, maybee 4/4 just off, i dunno abot alla that higher knowledge shit, any way

peep life and times of an mc its heart felt and deep
peep heart poured out, self exclamitory
peeo do you know [addictions] instant rb classic
return the favor niggaz, chances r i critiqued yours

i REALLYN CANT HATE ON THE SHIT YOU DO ITS TIGHT MAN.
no disrespect on my post eh. my aunt had just died she was only 20 you don't care . its cool only i wanted to give an explination why i was godbashing. nice drop. fat thread. tight lines