this is for the RSTL....

TOPIC: you have comitted the greatest sins throughtout your life, yet you are unpunished and die at a ripe old age. you are reincarnated into a position that punishes you for your previous life....expand.

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not that i'd like to see another man deceased, i got demands to meet
at least it gives my family food to eat, this spread of cancer seeds
I choose to find that fault resides in sin, not I, the sinner
fellow killers can relax among this company dinner
white collars mixed with crimson curtains turns to money-green
a bloody scene that runs between my moral and my profiting
sipping shampaign, i claim domain at the foot of the table
this is insane reality wearing the mask of a fable
our lable reads ' the smoothest, cleanest smoke you can buy
that's just illusion, really reading, if you smoke me you'll die
a man once questioned, "you'r a killer, how can you live with yourself?"
i then replied, "i play my roll and fill my spot on the shelf"
addictive additives we added gives us market advantages
this year we'll show a million more to death, and the advantage is?
by now i've grown too numb to feel the pain of a mother
see her son slip to addiction, puffing one after another
that's the money in my pocket, checks are signed by G. Reaper
we aim this market toward the youth, "smoking's the sexiest feature"
have i no respect for life, or am i blinded by lust?
who cares, i'll never go to jail for all the caufins i've nailed shut

upon my death bed, a long life lived, cant really complain
at 83 it just so happens i'm too old to maintain
my final breath of life and all i love was finaly breathed
time for final death, i thought, but with new life was relieved
the first time opening my eyes i heard such suttle, soft cries
a southern accent feared demise, "i dont want him to die"
a deeper voice declared my birth three weeks premature
my life was sprouted from those hopeless cancer seeds, i was sure
a future hero fallen victom to the cliff of poor descision
all ambitions were evicted, momma smoked till my submission
"he was born half the normal weight, there's no hope for his brain"
its sad, it took me dying twice to feel a cigerette's pain


let me know what ya think.

uppin for a response

I'll smoke jacks 'til I die... they say that shit'll kill you, right? Hey, i'm gonna die anyways, might as well do it with something I love.

lmfao...
subliminal suicide

this site has far too many sleepers...damn, this is a dissapointment.
you guys need to get your act together...consider this a last post for me....this site has gone to the shitters w/ the new management.

well I believe we all gotta die some day....why not enjoy it... ?
Also when I dont have my smoke boy I'ma bitch from hell.... so either I kill myself slowely or I end up killing some else... yup..

Nice post anyways....

Hot topic man... you kept shit interesting and creative I thought...
Shit had a decent flow, and a pretty good rhyme scheme...
I like the messege u sending here... I'm a non smoker (of tabacco), and so I agree wit alot of what u saying here

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No thats not cuz of the new management...It was worse before...fuck at one point we didn't have a site.

okay..i saw one actual reply regarding the piece...wow..
i dont think he was wanting your opinion on smokin..more so the piece itself..just a thought....
dude this site wasnt worse before..i was on it before it was gone for awhile, there wasnt even close to as much sleeping as there is now..but w/e, its kinda a lost cause to post really...

anyways bruh...you know what i think of this piece...some of the dopest shit ive ever read..concept is fuckin iLL..imagery is dope..like i was in a movie or something...youre just iLL man..thats all there is too it.....

fuck ignorent ass heads on this site...w/e
paze im outie

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i got you too man, good drop, ima smoker, of a few things [cock excluded] and i felt this peice, i just quit, naw " i was just bull shittin and you know this maaaannnn" ILL

uppin this joint

everybody needs to understand this....the fact that i am getting slept on upsets me because creative feedback/tips for improvement are the main purpose for this forum, and this site in many ways. i dropped this verse on two other sites, one being the site where the league it was written for takes place, and on both sites i recieved responces from well respected text-heads saying it was the dopest, cleanest, most origonal piece that has been dropped topical wise in quite some time...
I aint sayin all of this to be a bitch in any, shape or form...im saying this to wake this fukin site up...
not to tute my own flute, but, this is a deep ass piece...and yall cant say shit except "yea i smoke so..."

give some good responces, creative criticizm, tips for improvement...shit, point out the parts that you liked...do what this site is about.

What's ya RM name? Mr. E?

na...capital/calm.....yours?

damn kid........this shits a level above most katz on this site in so many wayz.....from the time and skill put into to it to the originality of the concept.....much much much props on this shit