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Old 04-07-03, 06:48 PM   #1
grimey won
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life changes in a second (plz comment on freestyle)

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itz funny how a nigga can be bangin' tha club all nite wit tha mic/
and go to changin' diapers, and silencin' crys in tha middle of tha nite/
go from jumpin' from venues in tha city wit bitches who pretty/
to holdin his baby boy, til' he go to sleep, man that shits gritty/
or even fuck your girl crazy, you know she likes it that way/
and just cuz u make paper, she calls it rape, and you in court tha next day/
or even smoke that chronic, or get that shit sold/
and your friends frame you then blame you , man that shit's cold/
cuz niggas i speak of tha future, like tha book of Revalations/
but all of a sudden i'm tha topic in everyones conversation/
tha man that had everything, now doesn't even have a girl/
i get pushed against tha wall, its me against tha world/
niggas couldn't take me, so they wanted me out in a rush/
all ma dreams of cream, man that shits crushed/
success has left me, like all tha life at a club shootin' scene/
can't even turn on tha t.v without ma name on tha screen/
i wish i never signed that record deal, that wish i be beggin/
take it in writing underground emcees, yo' life can change in a second/

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Old 04-07-03, 06:51 PM   #2
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i am really feelin that- nice rap and style. deep stuff.
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Old 04-07-03, 06:52 PM   #3
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Short, but I was liking one certain part especially.

"tha man that had everything, now doesn't even have a girl/
i get pushed against tha wall, its me against tha world/"

Feeling the message in this piece, the whole "everything changes instantly." I mean, it's kind of played, but you still did this piece pretty well wih that topic. You should've made it loner, that's my only complaint.

Re-pay: http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=37749

that's wrd.
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Old 04-07-03, 07:40 PM   #4
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more gangsta shit.....zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz, nothing original or hard hitting about this verse, although the rape lines were pretty deep and imagic. originality is pirceless
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Old 04-07-03, 09:23 PM   #5
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jonny 6-feet i think u need 2 put ur raps were ur mouth is, cause i heard u rap, and it wasnt anythin special, stop talkin shit bitch and fuckin flow, anyways, grimly i was feelin the shit, i could picture that bein an audio, think bout it, i thought it was good

soilder22

PS check out my new post "a soilders nightmare"

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Old 04-07-03, 09:35 PM   #6
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word, that was some deep shit
just donno if it was fo real ya know, i donno u maybe that is u and ur life and if so then it was deffinalty dope if not dogg it was still good rap just not u
either way i felt it
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Old 04-08-03, 11:29 AM   #7
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that piece was real, you can feel the regret and pain throughout the verse... nice drop... keep droppin'
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