this is it, im done, straight up, fed up
from my feet, knees, chest and my head up
i filled my cup, now its time to drop back
sick a messin w/ these beats, and these fucked up tracks
i need to do somthin, i need to make it clear
otherwise ill be hunted down, & i wont be sittin here
people want me dead, they want me put down
yo im a bad ass king, but for some reason they want my crown
i got fuckin 20/20 , but cant see the light of day
like im stuck in traffic, on a fuckin empty freeway
a yo im livin a life, but yo im already dead
like im stadin on a cliff but im off the fuckin edge
im standin over my life, and im at the fuckin ledge
if somthin gonna to happen, yo it needs to happen now
but then i sit back, and suddenly wonder how
cause i aint got no money, but im better then bow-wow
i need to make it to heaven, cause i been through hell
like im sittin in shackeld chains, but there aint no fuckin cell
my mother crys in my arms, but i cant cry while i hold her
sayin shes scared cause the landlord went and done told her
we out in a weak, i cant fuckin speak
somthin is not right, somthin is fuckin tweaked
somtimes i wanna stop, and grab the knife
prayin to god, im livin a soilders life.....

There's alot of imagery which is good. I love it when I get to read a good heart felt story. Try and through some vocabualry in there. It will make your story more intellectual. I recomend not using words you dont understand yourself though. And make sure you can actually say them to lol. But other than that I really enjoyed this peice. OoNnEe