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Old 04-17-03, 12:32 AM   #1
Bmack
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Life of a loner

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I spit fire with my words so stop drop and roll/

You gotta cross the bridge of life but you must pay the toll/

Dont let motherfuckers run you cause they'll take control/

Jus let me be your guide and take you out of that hole/

For life is full of circumstances and sometimes pain/

And without the sun all there is the rain/

Tell me about your problems and walk with me/

I am your on earth angel your problems I often see/

Your mother left you when you was three years old/

And ya father he left you too in a world so cold/

But I will be your blanket and keep you warm

Keep you clean and protected like when you was first born/

People through life are gonna make you upset and cry/

But dont take ya life no greater sin than suicide/

God opens one door and closes another/

And we should all over each other for we all are brothers/

And what is this about a catastrophe/

If the world ended today then so let it be/

Cause there is no peace in this universe/

U.N.I.T.Y has now taken a turn for the worst/

But my friend call on the lord and ask him for love/

And he'll send his message entrusted on a dove/

The gates of heaven open for the most angelic/

Cause evil's in the air and even you can smell it/

The Devil's using the Earth as his threshold of pain/

Where murders rapes and larceny make people insane/

Scared to even come outta your house/

Shit people today dont even trust their spouse/

Who knows when ya wife's gonna stab ya in the back/

Take half of what you got and go on a liabililty attack/

Demons come in all shapes and forms/

Even every beautiful rose has it share of thorns/

So take God by your side and hold ya crucifix tight/

Cause 16 hours of sunshine will turn into night

Good Night
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Old 04-18-03, 08:47 AM   #2
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Vocab Wern't So Good But Then Again Yoor Point Got Across Well... Try Not ta Have Space Between the Lines Coz It Slows the Flow Down.. Wernt the Worst Piece I've Seen..
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Old 04-18-03, 12:25 PM   #3
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Big words aren't always needed in a flow, In fact I believe people who use a high vocabulary 90% of the time are jus rhyming for the sake of rhyming and have no story behind it. Anyone can rhyme anything...if the message is correct then its really a good flow. Not protecting myself..keep uppin....Read the light..my other flow and see if you like, I think that one has more depth and no double space.
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Old 04-18-03, 03:24 PM   #4
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I think the vocab you used went in nicely. I liked the spacing you did made it easier to read lol. Nice work OoNnEe
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