Just spitting a freestyle for some input before i start gettin into battles.

aright check it

bend right down touch your head to your toes//
take it in the rear that's about all you know//
The lines you spit ain't got no beat//
you're always sittin at the computer//
just... beating your meat.//
take at look at yourself you ain't got no style//
lookin like something outta my ass//
that's now lying in messy pile.//
Im the kind of guy you'll see chillin at the bar.//
you'd likely wanna chill wit me but you wan't get very far//
you're leash is strapped on way too tight//
looks like you're gonna be someone's bitch tonight.//
Just cause I'm better is no reason to pout.//
I've had about enough of this.//
Peace ya'll I'm Out.//

yo, what up B-rad.. oops I mean B-Red.... lol.. that wasn't the best I've ever seen.. you are def improving.. you got some word play and metaphores... you still gotta work on flow.. how you word a piece is the most important part.. there's more than one way something can be said, you just have to learn the right one...

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