My soul's soaking in an ocean of perennial comatosing..
Yet it's hopeful, steppin on coast reveals a perfect overdosage..
I behold a utopia, realizing the meek crying have ceased dying..
The imprisoned innocent?...released to roam a free empire..
Rome failed cuz peace was mired, in men's beastly minds..
But now we deemed most pious, to a land of dreamy finds..
Like Wall Street's extinct, there's no motive for greedy times..
Resources shared freely...heartfelt more than meets the eye..
I'm all in shock, no doors are locked, no more keys to bind..
I don't reach for Nines, when someone takes a piece of mines..
Because it's all ours, the tallest towers reduced to all flowers..
We all showered with chowder, keepin belly walls crowded..
Existing on equal plains...forget those who sought power..
One belief, one God, then the devil's plans have gone sour..
All hours seem endless...binds of time are non-existent..
Humans serve each other freely...there's no monetary system..
All beings healthy...to wonderin minds poverty's a figment..
Market's expanded...the clout of any monopoly is shifted..
No weak links...Each member of the populous is gifted..
Immersed in joy...as if we live in a metropolis of children..
We walk in the nude...with the tits and cock swinging..
Without gawks or ridicule...free from the mocks ringing..
In schools we're taught living...and we strive respectfully..
Lives stress free...we have thousand year life expectancies..
This is a dream of mine...you won't find a press release..
Yet Heaven is my utopia...when I die it's next for me..

Hall Of Fame Material?..

Peace
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My soul's soaking in an ocean of perennial comatosing..
Yet it's hopeful, steppin on coast reveals a perfect overdosage..


nice nice opener,saladin,shit was mad deep and tight all the way through,liked it alot cat,

yer heaven is my utopia,when i die its next for me...
fucking ill felt,im so glad to see real cats spitting on this shit,not this gangsta shit thats jsut filled the boasr din the past day,mo guns mo wips mo clips all that bullshit...blah.
anywya tight drop saladin,peep my directions post sometime gimme a comment.
bismillah

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aight bro..
thanks for the critique..

uppin this..

this is some powerful shit. on another level with ur vivid imagery and depth. almost nas shit

SICK Verse...i liked it ....contend Nice


Holla at War Lords

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I don't reach for Nines, when someone takes a piece of mines..
Because it's all ours, the tallest towers reduced to all flowers..
We all showered with chowder, keepin belly walls crowded..

how do I put this in2 words....Damn I cant.I dunno y tha best stuff gets slept on,maybe because they wont admit sum1's betta than them in more wayz than 1.Dis piece had imagery,vocab,metties,siiick multis and evrything in between.I actually enjoyed readin it which is uncommon.Hope to see more from ya.Stay ^
-Avi

nice poem kid
i dont really see this to a beat
do it to audio and prove me wrong
nice and deep

elevate

not hall of fame material haha

Thanks for the critiques
uppin

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sick verse saladin. keep up work like dis shit and your goin far.

Fiori

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Thanks Dawg