This World Of Positive Motives Displays Delusional Notes
Packing Up Hope, Backing Up Hatred With Retributory Quotes
Tha Scepter That Grew Now Floats Underneath Frozen Oceans
Not Even Tha Hand Of God Could Fetch, Potency Is Hopeless
Growing In Golden Meadows Are Crops Already Altered By Fate
Tha Wake After Tha Wake, Now.. Thats Tha Icing On Tha Cake
My Body Shakes In An Epilectic Fashion Basking In Sorrow
Lessons Can Never Be Learnt From This, In Tha Class Of Tommorow
Can I Borrow A Fraction Of Happiness And Dwell In Tha Confines
So I Can Experience All This Talk About Walking Fine Lines
Falling Made My Day, Combined With Tha Commonplace Drivel
I Met Tha Middle..Now..N-Demik's Now Playing Second Fiddle
Tha Sickle Triples And This Iron Age Morale Is Sharpening Sides
Bidding For Life Is The Everyday Fool Faust, Batering Time
A Bin Laden Crime But Behold Tha End On A Much Larger Scale
Bird Brains Get Vacuumed, Not Me As I Clutch Fathers Quail
And Crush To Prevail, Sail To Victory In A Miniture Canoe
Altho Im A "Can-Do" Human, Theres A Limit To Hoops I Jump Through
Do You Compute...1,...2,...Notepad Check, On A Nomad Quest
But I Have No Legs, Can Someone Lend Me A Hand Or A Motion Chest
Because My Beats Are Frozen And My Pulse Is Hiding From Me
I Dont Mind Mind Battling, But Im Just Fighting To Breathe
Quieten Tha Beast Im Breeding Internally, Always In His Cage
Well In My Rib Cage And Tha Name Heart Is One Of Its AKA's
Saving Grace From Tha Will Of A Anti-Socialble Delinquent
Putting Himself In Equilibrium With His Protocols Of Instinct
Well His Mean Balance Is Inside A Maximum Security Prison
Im A Big Shot!...On Tha Net..And I'll Be Touring Through Britain
Storing Tha Equivolent Of A Whole Day Online Into This One Mind
Im So Wild!....I May As Well Go To Tha Store And Hunt A Lion
Then Go Stun A Tyrant By Practicing My Nefarious Actions
Making Tha Peak Captions And Attracting Tha Street To Masses
Im A Geek That Grasp's His Glasses? Maybe But My Span Is Massive
My Mindstate Is Of A Quality Status, Yea!..My Land Is Classic
I Can Stand To Fascists, Unload A Speech And Be Their Master
Colliding All Their Trains Of Thoughts To Steer To Disaster
I Used To Be A Mere Pastor, Now Anything Can Break Tha Chain
Now Im Sure As Hell That, That Takes Tha Sake....

ima drop feed on this in a few but could ya do me a fave and drop a vote on this

http://63.219.149.14/forum/showthre...&threadid=41530

thanx i'll give this some critique well worth the vote

damn ... people in here sleep on dope pieces.
this was way nice. not your best. but you got
everything across nicely. vocab and flow were
on point def. nice job....

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This World Of Positive Motives Displays Delusional Notes
Packing Up Hope, Backing Up Hatred With Retributory Quotes

vocab matchs the flow keep goin

Tha Scepter That Grew Now Floats Underneath Frozen Oceans
Not Even Tha Hand Of God Could Fetch, Potency Is Hopeless

damn good lines here

Growing In Golden Meadows Are Crops Already Altered By Fate
Tha Wake After Tha Wake, Now.. Thats Tha Icing On Tha Cake

flow is awesome feels like its a poem

My Body Shakes In An Epilectic Fashion Basking In Sorrow
Lessons Can Never Be Learnt From This, In Tha Class Of Tommorow

hmmm not quite gettin what ya tryna say but im sure i will soon enuff

Can I Borrow A Fraction Of Happiness And Dwell In Tha Confines
So I Can Experience All This Talk About Walking Fine Lines
im waitin lol

Falling Made My Day, Combined With Tha Commonplace Drivel
I Met Tha Middle..Now..N-Demik's Now Playing Second Fiddle

lol good good im feelin it again

Tha Sickle Triples And This Iron Age Morale Is Sharpening Sides
Bidding For Life Is The Everyday Fool Faust, Batering Time

gettin deep eh

A Bin Laden Crime But Behold Tha End On A Much Larger Scale
Bird Brains Get Vacuumed, Not Me As I Clutch Fathers Quail

damn im startin to like where this is goin

And Crush To Prevail, Sail To Victory In A Miniture Canoe
Altho Im A "Can-Do" Human, Theres A Limit To Hoops I Jump Through

seems like ya feelin pressured in some sort

Do You Compute...1,...2,...Notepad Check, On A Nomad Quest
But I Have No Legs, Can Someone Lend Me A Hand Or A Motion Chest

lol i liked it the flow and the punch just connected nicely

Because My Beats Are Frozen And My Pulse Is Hiding From Me
I Dont Mind Mind Battling, But Im Just Fighting To Breathe

its hard sometime

Quieten Tha Beast Im Breeding Internally, Always In His Cage
Well In My Rib Cage And Tha Name Heart Is One Of Its AKA's

lmmfao you got some nice punchs in here

Saving Grace From Tha Will Of A Anti-Socialble Delinquent
Putting Himself In Equilibrium With His Protocols Of Instinct

vocab and flow is what i saw here i dun think i ever seen them to words used as to rhyme

Well His Mean Balance Is Inside A Maximum Security Prison
Im A Big Shot!...On Tha Net..And I'll Be Touring Through Britain

who's in prison im kinda lost

Storing Tha Equivolent Of A Whole Day Online Into This One Mind
Im So Wild!....I May As Well Go To Tha Store And Hunt A Lion

yeah go try it if ya want

Then Go Stun A Tyrant By Practicing My Nefarious Actions
Making Tha Peak Captions And Attracting Tha Street To Masses

destructive mo fo

Im A Geek That Grasp's His Glasses? Maybe But My Span Is Massive
My Mindstate Is Of A Quality Status, Yea!..My Land Is Classic

keep droppin the heat ill keep readin

I Can Stand To Fascists, Unload A Speech And Be Their Master
Colliding All Their Trains Of Thoughts To Steer To Disaster
I Used To Be A Mere Pastor, Now Anything Can Break Tha Chain
Now Im Sure As Hell That, That Takes Tha Sake....

this was a better ender then the other one i reviewed


anyways this was nice as fuck i just liked the other one better i had trouble some time understandin what was tryna be said but overall i got this and thought it was pretty dope good flow mainly ya flow and vocabs but i saw some punchs in here that you didnt come close to have in ya other peice so i can say in a way this was on the same level as the story ya had posted overall dope drop


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