Niggaz comin thru alwayz tryna talk shit,
motha fucka I'm cold enough to leave u frost bit,
I nasty enough to step ur face in dog shit,
like dat dude dat played on "Black Night" wit Martin,
I'll punch u in ur gut til u start fartin,
and make u thwor up all ova ur mothaz carpet,
get a gat and use ur neck and ur back as a main target,
den u see so much blood den again u start barfin,
U could be alive I'll still throw ur frame in da garbage,
I'm now startin,
to act rudely wit a vengence,
I cussed out a teacha but dey neva threw me in detention,
to make myself feel big I'ma move in wit some midgets,
u fake wit me u gon have to get some stiches,
If u cool wit me den u bound to get some bitches,

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hahaaahaaahhaahhahahaaaaaaaaaaaahahaha , , i dont see any fuckin improovement , , , man stop usin dem gay ass lyrics , , ur lyrics are too simple , , ,, at least this drop was better than tha other whack one u did

kid aint gonna improve with peeps bringing him down

but he is right man you are too simple

you have a potential...how long ya been spitting for????

if u made ya lines abit longer and through in some multie's n shyt and upped ya vocab to make it abit more complex then it'd be tight

also try thinking of a topic nah mean if you just get a topicand make it a deep one then more people will read it

keep elevating man and fuck the hate just keep ya head up and stay humble pz

yea as all above had said, u got alot to learn, but any1 can learn dis shit, 1st thing is to find to style, 2ndly to find a subject that really matters to you, now remember rap aint just about being a gangsta, if u got a beef wid somin and spit it ur word play and vocab will increase automatically cus da shit means stuff to you personally, not many ppl can write good shit that they aint got strong views on, so as i said find yo style, think of somin dat pisses u off or makes you sad, emotion in yo words is a winner, write from yo heart, dont try and be what you aint.

much luv keep tryin, cheak out luv n loss by Zainy, dat shit emphisizes what i just said.

To da hataz fuck u!!!! To da niggaz givin me tips on how to improve thank u fa dat. Holla!!!!

Tell me somethin. Why y'all midle weight niggaz alwayz goin afta da newbiez? Huh? Pick on somebody ur own level nigga! Let me develope my skillz BITCH!!!!!!!!