in the red sea where last found...
hanging by the words of my last noun, hide life in a blackout,
awakened by lights of angels camping 'round my back ground,
then evil chants hound...
snakes scram, the bullhorn's shadow extending a helping hand,
& in the middle end, life stands, in preparation for farewell plans,
given no chance...
darkness yanks me by my left wrist, as light jerks my right arm,
at the same time, far...
masked insurance crooks pumping my heart, shooting to fight harm,
my appetite's hard...so my bag's packed, with time in my nap sack,
oxygen back stabs, blinding my sight with my very own flash backs,
hurried to act fast...as decisions float, around these four wall's hopes,
draw flat lines, evil colors the mold, outnumbered as my sin's unload,
vision exposed…with shivers whispering cold in this melting pot,
taking shots, at my young self by the frustrations of my yelling pops,
help me moms!! as she cried waterfalls bathing in cascades of torture,
handmade by the enforcer, timeout coached by the webs of the corner,
take orders…as hate talks in the back of my mind, but I wont snitch,
& fear lives caged inside my own ribs, with action also being thrown in,
with the same attitude shown since…known as the excuse for my steps,
my mind jogs in cold sweats, with its bullets poking through my flesh,
no room for this mess…emergency was for necessity, not for my body,
remains are engraved, with the ripping of capitals produced as unlucky,
not of my hobbies…it was for needs, I had to succeed, not bleed,
so I poked shots at the old man with the runny nose under the tree,
what can this be? is this a dream? all seen in mere seconds,
speared questions, answered as the light fades memories near lessons!!

yo this was pretty nice. good vocab and i saw some ggood multies. the topic was a good one too. somethin original...it was good.

fav line-hanging by the words of my last noun, hide life in a blackout,
awakened by lights of angels camping 'round my back ground,

i like how that was put together. could you check out the warlord collabo? its HOTT SHIT!!!

tanks, any more takes?

yea there was some good vocab there but i wasnt feeling this i mean that was basically wack, there was no fuckin point to that, i mean if u were talkin about the emergency room u culda atleast included a doctor or nurse or sumthin

yeah i agree with trill man you should definitely change the name of the joint, but otherwise i was feelin the content word up, i give it a 8 out of 10 na mean...check out the new joint Brain CANDy...this is s-y-n-o-p-s-i-s-t...one

what u think the insurance crooks are?
its text, so this is an abstract piece, before u diss it, u must understand it, decypher it...


its about a guy who just got shot, getting the offers of going to heaven or hell while the doctors fight for his life (masked insurance crooks), his sub-conscience is experiencing childhood flashbacks on how his life was so fucked up, so then had to resorts to selling drugs (old guy under the tree) leading to the shooting, he's laying there having these flashbacks not knowing he is dying


geez

Nice stuff
hurried to act fast...as decisions float, around these four wall's hopes,
draw flat lines, evil colors the mold, outnumbered as my sin's unload
Peep my "8 bars of Heart" and my "Destroying My sins' if you have time

last up

strayed off the topic there...vcoulda done better with your rhyme scheme your complexity and choice of words...keep elevating...wahid

are u the same ILL nik-a from hip hop headz?

ill shit btw

yo i tink thatshit was good, real goos word play insurance crooks...great wayo describin them, kwpp tha itle man it fits in

peace out

RIP TUPAC

yea same ill nik-A from HHH

its text, so I make it a bit more interesting rather then being straight forward with it, its a story, some will get it, some will not, reason I aint mad at the ones who dont


its all good
tanks to those whom replied

I see potential, keep elevating