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I cant take it anymore
IP: BC53 7603
Its hard for me to watch you trade your dyin worth for cheap thrills
youre scared your mom will find reciepts from buyin birth control pills it kills me seein you get hurt over some meaningless sex your bathroom trash cans overflowin holdin pregnancy tests you call me one week, happy, with a like-able mate then call me one month later cryin cuz your cycle is late jus turned the big 1-8- you should be thinkin bout college electives instead youre debatin which products the better contraceptive never neglected, had a father, so there crashes that theory this lifestyle is the choice that you have chosen to live, clearly fearlessly. no worries. H-I-V or S-T-D. youre aware of the dangers but still dont mean S-H-I-T so many nights spent on the phone, listenin to you go on and on bout how you jus do these things allthough you know their dead wrong but in the moment it feels so right- sneakin n!ggas in by the moonlight 7 days, 5 different guys- sneakin out before sunrise a mouth full of lies, i watch as you slowly begin to despise what you see in the mirror, it started wit the color of your eyes the were brown all your life, but now they aint good enough so you get some hazel contacts to try an spruce yourself up and now your overweight, your nose is too big, so many imperfections you used to love yourself but now you cant stand your own reflection ive known you too long to judge- i jus want the best for you ive know you too long to sit here and jus hold my breath for you I value you as a sister, never would want to harm ourfriendship but if this does then i cant think of a better way to end it.... i cant take it anymore... comments? |
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IP: 3380 A75D
yo I like that shit it was ill
but go check out my battle and vote for me in this easy battle I just need tha votes http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=46292 |
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..A New Breed of Femcee..
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^hate reps like that.
Sup nun...I was feelin this piece. Great execution of a well known concept. Nice flow and imagery, I felt like I knew the girl in some light. My favorite line was: >jus turned the big 1-8- you should be thinkin bout college electives instead youre debatin which products the better contraceptive Its sad really. Nice piece, no doubt. Stay up, ill keep an eye out for more ofyour work. Pz n propz. |
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IP: 5220 2725
i agree wit Dagyrl... i thought it was tight... the concept is old n borin but i tink u kinda shone a new light on it...
good piece, my nigga... |
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Tampons are expensive
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IP: EF0A E7B2
It aint that borin but yeah the concept was kinda been used too much....but the fact that ur ideas evolve and stretched out , it made ur poem very nice to read....
i think its good but try to think of other stuff that would make it more interesting and not just the same ones like we read in each poem...props for nice vocabs and concept... hopin to read more...
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<br><br><center>- Shiznit - - Tampons are still expensive - - That's a Fact - </center> |
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IP: 242B C97D
Thanks for bein real bout it....i understand ur comments, and what u mean- i'll look for yalls drops
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