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Old 05-10-03, 12:08 AM   #1
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ALBUM TRACK .. Almost Gave Up Featuring Point Game

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Artist - Delyreeuz Featuring Point Game
Album - Hood Respect
Song - Almost Gave Up
Produced By - Wyshmaster
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haterz alwayz tryna pull u down .. be the first 1'z to tell u something wrong .. we like fuck them, they on our nutz now

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Old 05-10-03, 01:13 PM   #2
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bytchez .. reply .. uppin
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Old 05-10-03, 02:37 PM   #3
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tight beat. Sorry... I'm not feelin your flow. You got a decent vocab but im just not feelin it. The second mc was nice as shit tho. He got mad flow... mad props. But you need to plactice flowin wit the beat. It sounds like you tried to fit some rhymes in the song that you wrote without the beat. You should freestyle to da beat before you write so you can feel how your flow should go.

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Old 05-10-03, 02:52 PM   #4
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lol .. itz all love .. this just the rough draft .. thanx for the feedback doggie
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Old 05-11-03, 02:06 PM   #5
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.. itz just the rough draft, i know i fell off at a few spotz, but a critique would be nice
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Old 05-12-03, 06:02 AM   #6
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yeah u did fall off a couple times....

PG came dope as usual,lol.... his albums ill as fuck too...
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Old 05-12-03, 02:45 PM   #7
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long time no listen dawg ok heres how i see it im feelin da beat i see u got sum built up animosity inside but get it out son lol@silk da shocker but u did use to sound like him overall da track is pretty nice yo verse we raw except yo flow fell off a few times but lyrically u always come onpoint pg also came raw dis track has bump appeal but as u say haters hate so just do u and keep elevating homey holla........
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Old 05-12-03, 10:42 PM   #8
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thanx for replyin 50 .. fuckin textceez have invaded rb and don't reply 2 shyt
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Old 05-14-03, 12:27 PM   #9
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i think it flowed ight to the beat. the hook was defintly off beat.
maybe if you slowed down the hooks lyrics a lil.. it wuld of flowed better.

the lyrics were tight. for a rough draft, this shit was hot.

the second verse was defintly off beat... but the lyircs held you up.

overall nice drop.
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Old 05-14-03, 12:59 PM   #10
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beat sounded lke sum thin from the slim shady lp.. not really feelin the flow.. not bad tho, u kinda sound like bubba sparxx lol
no disrespect.. decent track

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