what is this thing called LOVE?
it's pain and joy sent from above
you sit here wishing to fall,when that's not what you want at all
you want to love and be loved back
but all the people have love they lack,slack
it's like they don't even care
it's unnatural and unfair
to those who actually feel,let them steal
your heart which they try to protect with life and art
once love ends your torn apart , start
to try and bring your life back in one piece when it's difficult hard like a disease
try to please the ones who cause pain, when hate is what you start to gain it's insane to blame them for the same game you pulled
many months before when you just went to door to door
whore to whore
but you weaken and become poor,soar
and you began to grow
opened your heart and let your feelings show
they begin to run from you so fast but slow
tells you there is someone else and that they don't know
true feelings which they make up there mind,you turn weak and blind hateful and unkind,you bind
your heart around them and they commit suicide,
they say they love you then hearts collide,unite
feelings which will soon disapear,your left crying,alone comforted by tears,
when you realize wasnt worth it and light appears
deep in your soul you begin to pull together life
your left with love to depise,when you deprive yourself from it you hunger for the feeling,heartstealing,mind appealing thing i call

LOVE!!!

reads like poetry, simplistic stuff. dont just write down all the words that end in a particular sound and stick them all together it sounds amiteurish.

up the vocab and try adding a multi or 2. an original topic also goes a long way towards illness.

yer thi swas simplistic,but i think thats your style...a multi or two wouldnt hurt nahmean,i liked reading it,but the topic has been done to death nahmean...try find somethign else to rhyme about,you got a good talent in it you coud do ome ill shit if you ge thte right topics fo ryou nahmean....but keep posting i did enjoy this no doubt.....i liked the ending...

peep my spit zions missy...

bismillah

thanx for you input....wrote it for a friend....but i will use your ideas!!!

pe@ca 'n' Luv

this was cool...

feelin the simplicity of this drop..


got ya message through...

keep spittin..

peace
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