WHEN WE WERE KIDS, WE USE TO LIVE WRONG
STAY OUT WAY TO LONG, PAST MY CURFEW
ME AND MY MEN, I LOST A FEW
TO THE STREET GAME, HUSTLIN FOR HOOPTIES AND GOLD CHAINS
BUT THINGS CHANGE, AS YOU GET OLDER
NOW IM A SOLDIER, NOT A ROLLER
PRAYING FOR THE YOUNG GIRLS PUSHING BABY STROLLERS
WITH NO FATHER FIGURE FOR THEIR SEEDS
STRONGER MEN IS WHAT WE NEED
SLOW DOWN MY MAN TAKE HEED TO WHAT YOUR ELDERS SPEAK
NOTHING IN THE STREETS BUT QUICK DEATH
SELLING D WILL GET YOU NOTHING BUT STREET WEALTH
OR INCARCERATED.
I TELL ALL MY DOGS BUT MOST HESITATED
WAITED FOR THE REAPER TO CALL THEIR NUMBER
SMOKING REEFER TO NUMB THEIR NERVES, AND I WONDER
IF THEY WILL MAKE IT THROUGH THE LONG NIGHT
TO SEE BRIGHTER DAYS AND BASK IN THE SUN LIGHT
OF EVOLUTION.
TRY TO AVOID REVOLUTION, AND FIND NEW WAYS TO GET PAID
IN ORDER TO DODGE NEW GRAVES, AND CORRECTIONAL INSTITUTIONS.

LIVE LIFE
J-STACKS

REVOLUTION IS MAKING THE SAME MISTAKES IN DIFFERENT WAYS, WE MUST EVOLVE TO SEE BETTER DAYS.

aight u rite nice verse

yo dawg i agree wid u kidz aint kidz no more
dey be thinkin drugs n guns da rite way to live, niggaz be gettin shot n banged up everyday because if diz
aint nowere safe for dem to play, well i say FUCK GUNS.
my brother was only five only fixin his tie wen he dropped a dime,
went to get it but wernt in time n all i heard was a loud bang,
he was layin on da floor blood pourin more n more
i screamed n fell held him to my chest tryin to wipe da blood from his vest
told him i loved him n he was da best sed he had to make it for da rest of his life, told him to stay wid me n fight together well get thru it plz just stay wid me atleast 1 more nite dont go towards da light,
i begged n plead it just cudnt be he aint done nofin wrong
he was only passin by he was only five for fucks sake plz dont die
i screamed n yelled but no1 came waitin 4 sum1 i tried to ease his pain
he he opend his eye n a tear fell down n turned red by da blood comin from his open sore
his lil hands wrapped round my wrist he sed im his big sis sed he loved me n wud miss me told me not to worry bout him
i looked at him in his eye saw his pain dat he was hurtin inside whoever took his life has also taken mine ripped my heart n pulled me apart we always sed we wud never part, how wrong was i
den i realised he aint gona live
so held him tight strokin him, hes heart was nxt to mine like 2 souls intwained hard to believe dis was da last time id see him alive all i cud do was cry,
n den his lil fingers unwrapped from my wrist n fell to da floor
dat was da last beat of his heart i gave him a kiss n sent him away to god!

This was Whack , , up ur vocab and wordplay

this was ok, like bash said, work on vocab, when i first started i was gettin criticized like this too, and now im just gettin slept on, but yo, all in all it comes from the heart, shit is worth it. elevate yo

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Only God can judge me, Who THE FUCK IS YOU?!

what th fuck is wrong with you if you want to battle yalla back

if you want to flow with a real pimpster write the words

SO FRESH WANT TO THROW
DO YOU KNOW ABOUT SNOW AND HERBS
THIS IS REAL LIFE, NOT JUST WORDS
BUT NOW I SAC UP NOUNS AND VERBS
YOU ARE ABSURD, IM SO HOT I SCORCH THE EARTH
BURN THE CORE.
A YOUNG SMART THUG, CHICS ADORE
LOVE THE CASH, DETERMINED TO GET SOME MORE
BURY THE HATCHET IN YOUR MANTLE, JUST TO SETTLE THE SCORE
AND I EMPLORE YOU TO ADJUST, BEFORE YOU GET 2 ABOVE YOUR NECK.

ITS REAL
J-CASE

this was aight....need to flow betta