he fucked yp the battle so i am redoing it

shockthaworld's verse



ayo lil smokey look I’m the best-that-is-known when I stepped-in-this-show why can’t you just leave-it-alone//
Why post? No one reads your lines anyway like CREDITS at the end-of-a-show//Cuz I blew you away with caps from various mags//
like walkin in Blood and Crip wars wrapped in American flags//
But look though Here's some food for thought, I'll knock ya teeth down till you ingest wisdom//This isn’t just a threat, It's an order for you to take out//
I serve bullets and losses, so take this with you on the way out//
Sliced and diced, shock covers you with battle scars//
You need to take-classes cuz I’ve seen harder PUNCHES inside of KOOL AID PACKETTS//
Cuz this battle is like typin passwords, your punchin, but only seein *****( stars )//

My Verse


check this man rappin ta "shock the world" with no talent ,
hand you a super glued mic ta keep you silent /
"lil smokey" choke ya with verbal fumes dat violent ,
i let you repeat of my own mic...... it'll knock ya out of a~line~ment /
i rewrite ya verses like a lyrical bible turned to a game of scrabble ,
blah blah blah dis man does nothing but babble /
pointy verses pointed at you like verbal knives stabben ,
sweep kick ya child hood dreams of being a emcee- ya still not standing /
i feed dis newbie a case of "RED BULL" and he is still not elevating , ( suppose to grow wings )
send this man to hip hop boot camp and start his training /
in this game he stands about as tall as his avatar,
rip dis cat wit only a few bars~scars him~ never a star /
this man is from michigan~ what kind verse will we hear ,
he spits of a beat of his guitar, voice crackles like he swalloed a spear /
as clear as day this man'll shed us a tear ,
imma give you these 10 pointers like a trophy buck deer /
this man got ass one time cause the hood freak drunk a 5th and a case of beer ,
spit ghastly tunes that confuse ya body into a state of fear /......
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you just plain silly~ i rap ( wrap ) dis man like a philly,
send smoke out da mic like mustard gas dat make ya spine feel chilly /

holla

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lil monkey was whack, i vote shock
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wack battle. shock's lines were weak, punches not connectin. lilsmokey had better flow and punches.

VOTE ---> lilsmokey
poll me up at http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=47710

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lilsmokey 1-0

it was just aight mayn..i'll give it to smokey


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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=48244

hey can ya please drop a vote on this for me ill return the fav soon ass ya done

Lil Smokey just brutalized this dude...

Shock's was kinda of choppy and didn't flow very well...

"imma give you these 10 pointers like a trophy buck deer /
this man got ass one time cause the hood freak drunk a 5th and a case of beer"

Nice and funny too...
As "rough" as these battles are, it's very nice when they can make the readers and judges laugh...

That made me laugh.

Lil Smokey

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With better creativity..... wordplay.........punches...... I give it to.............Smokey. Those the structure needs improvement.

Vote - Smokey

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