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Old 05-21-03, 12:04 AM   #1
KRISSKASS
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The Reality

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Yo, let me say a little flow about the present era..
War, Deseases, and Terrorist Al-Quaeda..
Connected in every way possible to scare ya..
Down with the funk and stench of maleria
Aryan brother hood is higher as we become inferior..
Fuck that, i rather cut an incision and see through the interior..
Neverending story about money,land,power, and glory..
This is the real life about the end of our minority..
Seek and destroy anotha land for good old uncle sam..
Sniff my info until you say "I Said God Dam, God Dam"..
This spit is gaining force streched like a battering ram..
Straight up your anus is the next step to be crammed..
Feel it tight like a virgin getting popped on a one night stand..
Mass appeal is what i want in my hand ..
I don't want the platinum, I just want to make you understand..
Choose or loose a chance to take a glance...
The Time is running as it lets go the last grain of sand..
Boom, The End is here before we even a chance...
Yesterday,Today, and Tommorrow is the same stance..
One day we die not knowing the shit we passed bye..
Beuty is us to behold In the devils eye..
Always look at what makes you tick and tock clockwise..
Look deep and deep at the holders of the light...
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Old 05-21-03, 03:20 AM   #2
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hmm there were some solid lines in the middle/end but i couldnt really catcht the flow lacked a litttle complexity..... but yo puttin it out there - decent spit
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Old 05-21-03, 05:41 AM   #3
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yeah, i dunno what you were really on about or what your point was, anyway it was a o.k spit, some good lines:
"This spit is gaining force streched like a battering ram..
Straight up your anus is the next step to be crammed.."

just keep working on it
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Old 05-21-03, 07:01 AM   #4
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Yo, let me say a little flow about the present era..
War, Deseases, and Terrorist Al-Quaeda..
Connected in every way possible to scare ya..
Down with the funk and stench of maleria
Aryan brother hood is higher as we become inferior..
Fuck that, i rather cut an incision and see through the interior..
Neverending story about money,land,power, and glory..
This is the real life about the end of our minority..
Seek and destroy anotha land for good old uncle sam...........after that u drifted off the topic and then sorta got back to it at the end..................


just a suggestion
try n stick to the topic all the way, like i know we all ten to drift away but like read it and then try n get the whole thing flowing to one topic
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