Talon=Red
Crazy B=Blue


on the mic you know i'm the most explosive
your to low to notice, that my flows ferocious
the competitors trebble, at this preditor devil
I have high rhymes you have high estrogen levels
you little bitches, you cannot witness provokin' fitness
no ones business, im sick and motion sickness
is caused, im the most feared and clearly the baddest
inferior faggots, that done battled me - have experienced havoc
the best you see, known as the greatest, especially
when everytime i spit, i come off sick effectively
Psychologists confused, I'm droppin an amused, Lockin this,
The topic is, I'm overdriving going into hyper electrolysis
Girls? No one is gunna kiss you with Destruction of living tissue,
Justice is gonna get you, and everyone is gonna diss you
I don't know where this is goin, I'm crazed like a perv
Talon bitch, copyrighting this shit all rights reserved..

Your rhymes are whack a matter a fact
you can take that shit back to ware you came
This aint a war for votes or a fucking game
lame ass killa try act hard
Bet you pile of lard that sits at ya computer all day
but hey thats your thing you can bring what you want
and taunt all need you prolly bit yor rhyme like a fiend
You prolly the clueless killa on the toturial
ima send ya to yo grave and have ya momorial engraved
not saved death my Knock out
quit pountin stop shoutin
all that giberish you speakin
sumthins reekin i think its your flow
you need to learn how to bust a rap you dirty ho---mo
Ill show your ass to the doo (door)
Hit the the floo (floor) you hear to blast's from the back of tha room
thinkin you the greatest like you trippin on sum shrooms
Im the killa that con "sumes" people
Dont hide in a church or hide in a steeple
Cause muthafucka you cant hide from me
I know everything so let it be
dont bit this rhyme it aint free
So take ya ass back to the suburb
american history x bitch
ill make u get down and bite the curb

aigh't break it down. talon man u got some talent with flow, ur all part was flowin well and ur structure was tight, rhyme scheme was pretty good and u had alot of nice multi's but what was lacking from ur part I thought was some wordplay, there's wasn't to much to it just basic wordplay and everything was pretty straight forward but u came hard with some nice vocab and that made up for it. crazy B, ur flow was a bit choppy, lost it here and there and ur rhyme scheme was kinda hard to pick up at some parts, structure coulda been a bit stronger to, and it could use some better vocab, there were a few tight multi's in there though.
but all in all good piece guys. keep droppin an elevate. peace.

oh and if u 2 got the time check out mine and masta C's two collabs "Hight Times (feat.Masta C)" and "High Times *The Sequel* (feat. Masta C)" and leave us some feedback. muchly appreciated. thanx in advance.

oh and both of u's if ur lookin to join up in a crew go and try out for Corrupted Visions I got the link to the thread in my sig. hope ta see u 2 there. peace.

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yea talon you got some skill in this shit,good vocab,good structure, well laid out, i thought you came on point completely,erythin seemed to be in order,very ill{BROOKLYN IN THA HOUSE AND REPPIN TO THA FULLEST]crazy b:your flow was kinda choppy,rhyme scheme lacked a bit, and your structure was a bit off too,your point got across though,try uppin your flow,other than that this collab was ill.keep droppin tha hotness.~1~

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i have to say i agree that talons verse was stronger with better flow, seemed to read better, but thought it made a decent colab on the whole you both showd some nice qualities.....so peace dawgs! and keep droppin em,....

can you both hit this open plz.......
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=88249

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