This is one of my first songs, please tell me if I blow ass or if I'm hot, or somwhere in the middle. Its kind of a lighter song, not supposed to be badass or thug-like, because I am not a thug. Just true shit that I believe needs to be said by me.


Redloks stompin rhymes causin aftershocks.
Taking words to your brain like a sledge to some rocks.
I’m nice and I have these rappers thinking twice
I’m dont want Vanilla Ice, if you do you can pay the price.
I like eating M&M's, I rhyme better than both of them.
I’m slimming these wack cats down like I was Phen-Phen
I’ll make it a sport that you’ll never see on ESPN
Cause after I’m done writing I’ll stab em with the pen.
Get your shoes and your shit cause this is where the quest begin.
And don’t ever fucking ask me to come off of the top again.
I kick like the fast and furious Streetfighter Turbo Ken
My rhymes are ruling over the ‘tics like I was Big Ben.
I’m not a fucking Eminem wanna-be.
I rhyme while doing a Benni-Hanna on the top of a banana tree.
You look like Louisiana is where you ought to be.
You should have seen how Anna Kournikova looked at me.


hook-

I’m sick of the shit that’s on the radio these days
I can’t believe that off these songs money is being made
I’m not writing this one expecting to get paid
And I doubt its increasing my chances of getting laid.
So lets take a little trip down the lane of the future.
Its Redloks the suture – spit venom like the hair of Medusa.
Your rhymes are putrid your makin stupid motions.
Get back in you Benzo and roll into the ocean.


Man, that hook was a fucking breeze.
Oh I’m sorry did it hurt your feelings?
Did you write yours while you were smoking banana peelings?
I believe that same one was used by 98 degrees.
So please stop that rhyme imitation now.
Your fans have as much taste as the movie Kung Pow.
You want some rhyming lessons from Redloks? I’ll show you how.
First I’ll write like you, “Uhh, ghetto ghetto cow”
And now I’ll rhyme like me these lyrics are coming easily.
My shit will flow freely like I’m an ass-naked baby.
Okay that’s a little much I can admit.
Rapping in the context of a baby takin a shit.
So I’ll hit you in this bitch but and won’t let you off the hitch.
I’ll keep dissin on you bitch and I’m never going to quit.
But don’t flinch it’ll only make things worse.
Because the next Caddy you’ll be riding in will be a hearse.



Am I writing this so I can buy a chain? No.
Do I rhyme about how much I love the fame? No.
Do I rap about the same thing every day? No.
Do I take the blame for thuggin bringin the pain?. No.
I’m snoring over your boring raps about whoring your crap
Drinkin forties after hearing it I feel I need a slap
You need practice bitch, take that wack shit back to your shack
Redloks is fantastic, I know your girl fucks like she’s in gymnastics.
‘Locks shocks like static I’ve had it with the rappers
Throwing their hats around trying to make it clap drinkin frappers (frappacino)
And saying they’ll cap but I just sit back and laugh.
After battling me you’ll have a lump in your throat like staph.
I’ve had half my redemption like Shawshank,
The only gold I’ll prolly ever wear will have to come from a straw crank.
I wish people could see the wackness cause they aren’t at all swank.
But they can still afford to put rims on their piggy banks.

yo why the fuck yall sleeping..

uppin for the cat...come on...

nice especially bein one of ya first songs,u got potential lyrically and the more u write n shit the betta ull get,keep doin ur thing dog.1

ya.. it was pretty good.. some wordplay and a pretty good vocab 4 a beginner..

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this shit was aight, i was diggin the wordplay but jus structure you bars a lil better. keep it comin!!!!!

hmm...pretty ok...if this your 1st joint foreal...

some wordplay u have can be twirked more to have a bigger impact....

solid though

Yeah, some of my bars get crammed when I spit, but I can rap pretty fast. I can admit a few of my lines need to be tweaked, as the song really isnt finished yet. Thanks for sayin you like the lyrics though, I really appreciate that.