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Old 06-07-03, 12:34 AM   #1
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I Love You....

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If I could change just one thing in my life, I bet you know what it'd be
To have you come close, over here and cuddle up right next to me
To have you, to hold you, to whisper sweet nothings in your ear
For me to make a joke and to get your cute snicker
To not be afraid of what you'd say, to go forward with a bitta heart
To actually have talked to you before it happened and I got deeply hurt
Yes you had sympathy for him, for what he had been through
But why Jill oh why, when I deeply needed you
If all my heart isn't enough to give, then I don't know what else I can give
The time that we spend together, why are your emotions deeply hid
I feel the gravatation towards you, and I know you feel it too
A million lives I could live, and I'd only want to be with you
And in the end what's done is done their is no use in having regrets
But if I could change but one thing I did, you know what I'd do, I bet...



Pondering great thoughts, doing great things, and death I'll be doing this 'til
And in everything that I ever write, my heart will be, and I'll be seriously loving Jill
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Old 06-07-03, 01:38 AM   #2
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mad man i love it ... but i didnt know you felt so deeply for me ... lol j/p nice drop dawg
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Old 06-07-03, 02:56 AM   #3
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That was a good drop........poem are nice because no matter what they are about, as long as you put effort or feeling in them, they turn out nice.....some people got a better way of doing it than others but everyone should feel it. This drop was simple and nice. Keep spittin'.............
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Old 06-07-03, 03:13 AM   #4
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Mad Man, That was ill drop, I can tell it meant something to you.....Keep doing what your doing.....Being Ill
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Old 06-07-03, 03:53 AM   #5
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cool m'n--liked the topic-an dug the verse completely--much luv --peace
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Old 06-07-03, 05:32 AM   #6
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wow...very passionate drop full of emotion i am loving it
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Old 06-07-03, 12:37 PM   #7
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nice work mad.
very little vocab, but the simplicity brought the point across perfectly. It showed that there was nothing covering your love. I enjoyed it.
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Old 06-07-03, 01:22 PM   #8
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Great flow which was consistent throughout.. Work on the vocabulary and you'll be repeatedly putting out class-A drops. Good Luck
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