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Old 01-26-04, 11:10 AM   #1
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Against Me

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Im facin the judge, Tellin the truth while erasin a grudge,
Wont somebody ugly even love-me Im waitin ta punch,
Soon yall be like little kids while Im a fuckin monster starin,
Cant roll wit ya, like I was ridin and fuckin lost ma bearins,
I dont really fight, but you be fucked if you crossed ma errands,
Id kill your whole family and ya mothafuckin fosta parents,
After the aftermath laughter is great along wit my masterd rap,
Return to the beginnin and do a muthafuckin faster lap,
Disaster happens, and Ive only been around since last year,
Illl crash here and ask queers too be useful and pass beer,
Movin up in the world, Im fuckin this girl like theres no tomorrow,
Ill slap these bitches and tell em I need a fuckin hoe to borrow,
I aint payin ya, Ill just be layin ya cause I got this fuckin Bitch Made,
Im a switch blade, Been carryin vibes inside me since fifth grade,
To this day, Im bouncin out faggets makin a controversial appearance,
To his dismay, I kick him out shoutin until he fixes his clearance,
One-of-these-days, It'll all be over when somebody-plays,
Cause what comes back is what one-dummy-sprays,
Im still on top, just sittin witta fuckin gun to ma head,
Try to fight my way out and leave one of em dead,
But this aint the movies so everyone gets too watch my brains splatter,
The fact I died the champ wit no neck stamp is the main matter,
Devidin all my stories into and my 'brains' into some insane platters,
Remember me, Think of my good times mom and think of pain after,

Let me know what you think.
Pz.
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Old 01-26-04, 12:10 PM   #2
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this was actually not bad..you are getting better..your flow was decent..wordplay seemed okay..keep up..~click on my sig..
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Old 01-26-04, 01:03 PM   #3
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this was actually not bad..you are getting better..your flow was decent..wordplay seemed okay..keep up..~click on my sig..




pretty much... good drop...
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Old 01-26-04, 01:18 PM   #4
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Dont even bother givin me feed back if u gone say shit llike that avon, u newb.
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Old 01-26-04, 02:04 PM   #5
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Calm Down Kid. . It's Better For Him To Do That Then Have Two Replies That Sound The Same. . It's Called Being Repetitive, He Avoided That Happening With His Reply. . Anyway. . Flow Was Good, Content Was Ok. . Even Your Lines A Little Bit More So You Can Capture A Better Flow. . Multi's I Saw Were Ok . . Try Expanding And Becoming More Complex With Your Multi Placement In Your Rhymes, Ya Follow ? Oh, And Don't Take My Word For Any Of This I Just Told You. . I've Only Been Doin This Here For 7 Years. . No Reason To Take My Suggestions Into Consideration. . Lol, Kiddin Kid, Pz.

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Old 01-26-04, 02:13 PM   #6
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thanks for the feedback, and my bad avol, Im just in the middle wit beefin wit voice of the streetz and we have dickriders in our crew and im just generally gettin pissed off today. plus other shit off Rb.
anyways thanks.
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Old 01-26-04, 02:22 PM   #7
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nice open mic..to bad im about to rip u..go check in
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Old 01-28-04, 10:34 AM   #8
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it was tight man just keep doin whad u doin u might can get a deal wit some company but i dont know just keep going u straight.
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Old 01-28-04, 02:20 PM   #9
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Yeah this was alright here....you had some good multies through out the piece, liked that...structure could be a bit better, even the lines up a bit more like Formula said....flow in this was pretty good, it stayed on through out the piece....you had good content....liked the read...keep at it.
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