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just some thoughts
stalagmites of hardened blood coated the ceileing and tight verses reopened bloated feelings while i was tied with ropes an stuck with cimeters teeth filed down an hopes were fucked an limits were not of consicuence as i was bleeding secrets and asendence an death were fleeting but lockets filled with cocaine an violence spilled in vain an dropped with silence as my families eyes were ripped out my iniquities ties to them were clipped an doubt entered m,y minds eye and slipped throug the cracks of my depression as blood squirted and seeked attack was my identity an guessin was i, flirtin peeked an sweet was the taste of pain almost the same as pleasure or like weed laced with heroin came the treasure of fuckedupedness and uselessness but why endlesss exertions of my sins were displayed an quenced was my face as a thousand pins stuck my body and fadeing was the light trading places my element an signatured ideal until the cold steele i know so well was in my palms sold on an ordeal a squeezed and it pleased an calmed my brains reactions until them mutha fuckas was dead chain reactions until them mutha fuckas had said or done nothin further or hurt tha people i love or stolen the drugs i love an cannot part with from my broken heart to my broken past i found the spoken close an the wicked closea with a chokin sentiment an a dig it vibe boasts tha horrible demons and horrible humans that changed my life and ranged from child to wife or the pains i entered or things i commmited much luv to those responses |
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Nice piece..........keep doing you...............
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That was good, nice vocab, but i think you should polish it up a little to make the rythm more regular. That's the only thing that needs a lil fixing. It really made me feel i was there tho, great poem but can be even better, keep it up. Y representa por los latinos ese.
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