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Old 06-07-03, 08:56 PM   #1
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Tears

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Its kinda short but thats ok,right?

Tears
What are these running down my face?
Moving at a slow dragging pace,
Am I really a disgrace to the world?
Huh? Hear them dripping now,
I allow them to fall,
I cant stand tall and hold them in,
They free fall down over my chin,
My grin no more,
It went out the door along with my soul,
Having to take a stroll now to stop the tears,
Running from all my fears,
Those that have haunted me for many years,
It appears that my time is growing down,
Grin now a frown,
Soul feeling brown,
These tears keep rolling down...

Thats all.
Tears Tears
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Old 06-08-03, 01:09 PM   #2
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I wasnt and still not real crazy about the topic, but you made it work! Decent piece. Keep em' coming.
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Old 06-08-03, 01:23 PM   #3
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Good, nice feel to it, oh and The life we live, isnt measured by what we do, but by what we give to the ones that love us. Only then can we be truly happy." is by Mark Twain, or someone like that...keep 'em comin'...
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Old 06-08-03, 02:05 PM   #4
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Thanks for the replies, and it very well may be by him but when I added it there it just came to mind so i said it was by me. I dont rember ever hearing it but dont mean that its not.
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Old 06-08-03, 08:55 PM   #5
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Tryin' to get reviews on this, hook me up wit a few.
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Old 06-08-03, 11:28 PM   #6
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i liked it.. pretty decent piece... keep puttin shit up man..
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Old 06-09-03, 01:19 AM   #7
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Like you said it was short but it go the point across......

Showing how u feel and shit, nice drop....
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Old 06-09-03, 03:55 AM   #8
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it was short but okay but i still liked it tho...but then again when some one crys it always leaves a mark of the hurt they was goin through...but yea goodjob and try expressin yaself a lil more and get deeper into tha subject nah mean...pz and much luv
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Old 06-09-03, 01:25 PM   #9
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^Thanks, I did this in a few short mins and its struck tears to all the people I let see it so far, its not my deepest but its still may fav.
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