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what happens when drinking
IP: EF0A E7B2
What happens when drinking
*Near to the door* *he paused to stand* *as he took his class ring* *off her hand* *all who were watching* *did not speak* *as a silent tear* *ran down his cheek* *and through his mind* *the memories ran* *of the moments they walked* *and ran in the sand hand and hand* *but now her eyes were so terrible cold* *for he would never again* *have her to hold* *they watched in silence* *as he bent near* *and whispered the words..* *"I LOVE YOU" in her ear* *he touched her face and started to cry* *as he put on his ring and wanted to die* *and just then the wind began to blow* *as they lowered her casket* *into the snow....* *this is what happens* *to man alive.....* *when friends let friends....* *drink and drive.*
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<br><br><center>- Shiznit - - Tampons are still expensive - - That's a Fact - </center> |
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IP: 640C 3FBD
I just got done saying this in the last response but here goes again. You either come up with something completely new or write about something old so much better than everyone else has.
This one was very sad. It was short with a lot of info and emotion in it. I liked it a lot. "*and through his mind* *the memories ran* *of the moments they walked* *and ran in the sand hand and hand* *but now her eyes were so terrible cold* *for he would never again* *have her to hold* *they watched in silence* *as he bent near* *and whispered the words..* *"I LOVE YOU" in her ear* " That was the part I liked a lot. It was sad. Nice job. |
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