I dont give a fuck anymore,
im comin hardcore its in store
you can sell sea shells by the sea shore
but u can never bring down my lyric horde


emotions flowin goin off elopin from my dome wit quick motion
showin noone that yes i am a quick speakin rican wit nuttin to live fo
puches pulled and used to cool the temerature of my hot

WAIT WAIT

ima go a lil deeper....

i once loved a girl whos werld was unlike mine
i devoted my heart, my mind, and all of my time
to be shot down like a iraqi bomber over isreal
she was beutiful, but she couldent get the visual
its pitiful, this ritual im into of missin-you
even tho im relentless, im still repentfull
i liked you, hell, id even say i loved you
cuz u always tryd to say i was above-you
but im stuffed-full of games you played
my selfish ways, the thangs that u say
make this thug wanna cry himself to sleep
the deep conversations you had with me
the love we shared, found out it was one sided
u didnt lie, just out and said it was another guy



I dont give a fuck anymore,
im comin hardcore its in store
you can sell sea shells by the sea shore
but u can never bring down my lyric horde




*screaming*

how could you do this? i gave you the werld!
and the things i couldent give i stole for this girl!
i liked you, i lied-to-you, but also confided-in-you!
i even played the bitch in front of ppl to side-wit-you

*calms down*

compliments i didnt have to give but i did
the shit i put up wit, the tears that we shed
all amounts to nothing when nuthins sumthin
mind twisted heart thumpin adrenalin pumpin
i stood-wit-you, i looked-at-you, i didnt meen to snap
but now i dont give a fuck, i dont care about that

*fade singing*

I dont give a fuck anymore,
im comin hardcore its in store
you can sell sea shells by the sea shore
but u can never stop my lyric horde

lol@quick speakin rican
and.. is this about danielle?

K m8, this is one a good subject matter, but i wernt really feeling the hook but for a non audio piece u could ahev used more vocab and more metaphors to describe your feelings, over all tho a heartfelt piece

Eborted Verdict- C+

it could be, but it might not be,

it might be sumthin for those lil kids to copy and give to their girlfriends

if ud like me to write ur g/f a poem send me a pm and well discuss payment options

[shit, duues gotta make a livin, if every one on this site sends me one dollar, ill leave the site, cuz thats 15000 dollars...]

Deep Ish Kapone...It was Nice though, I read the Hook at the start and was a bit thrown off haha but once you got into it..It was NICE!...

*screaming*

how could you do this? i gave you the werld!
and the things i couldent give i stole for this girl!
i liked you, i lied-to-you, but also confided-in-you!
i even played the bitch in front of ppl to side-wit-you

^^That Section WAs Dope^^....Nice Piece Mun....

...........Pz...........

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thanx dog.....

i want ppl to see this.. it was keyed fast, and fuck bmuse if he comes in here and starts talkin shit

ill be the first to say fuck you, in advance....


anyway.. up

o yea, add also

i didnt want a hook on it

its just that if i left it one big colum u wouldent read it all...

lol... it IS about danielle... you jabberin on YIM about how you dont care...

im sayin its universal cuz it dnt got personals in it, it actually isnt writtin wit danielle in mind

can some one slap a cmment on....

I enjoyed it................................................

wow, 1 comment....

and i boubt he read it.....

uppin

damn...feels like this piece was all powerful and it slapped me like ive never slapped before....i kinda relate this with someone i know...she's fucked up...she's nothing....she lied to every1 else but for a few exceptions...she didnt mean to tho..she was addicted to the fact that she's not herself...she's pretending to be somebody else.....she's confuse not only with whats happening but also what happened in the past and what would happen in the future....she's basically just like me..the only difference between us is how is our views in life....sometimes i wanna talk to her and make her understand that its not the end of the world but its definitely hard to just turn away cuz for that moment that she's turning away...someone might come and she just gonna let it pass her way....

well im thinking that this girl is very lucky to have someone writing all these stuff for her ... if she read this ..i bet she would like it......but in my perspective kap...what if you dont deserve her...what if there's someone else out there better than her that would make you happy?...well just a thought

***and yeah i passed out again...i havent really had enough sleep this pass few days so sometimes i just passed out and shit like that..***

well nice piece.....

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thank you, yea, lotta what ifs, read the last lines...

I DONT GIVE A FUUUUCCCKKK

nope, not one fuck

if i dont deserve her, i dont deserve her, o fuckin well, i waste my time for no person.. dont waste lines on a nobody.. so the lady this was writtin for obviously is werth my time, in thine own eyes...