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06-16-03, 04:11 PM | #1 | ||||||
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Society-From Cambodian-American Perspective
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Society Verse, From an Asian-American Perspective
I’m just looking for some comments on my lyrics, whether it be good or bad. Just tryin’ see what level im at and where I need to be at. Let me know what yall think. Good lookin’ out yall. Society’s blind at times, we express online what’s on our minds/ Mines is tryin’ ta find why, we droppin’ like flies and killin’ our kind/ Killin all kinds wit nines and knifes that take ties and lives/ Cut’um in pieces, the deceased is.. now filled wit holes, how we gonna beat this/ No disrespect but that Crystal Meth is the reason you meatless/ Now peep this, even wit the best vest on yo chest, you still couldn’t cheat death/ Tech to yo neck, inject ta dissect and leave ya breathless/ Hope you get this clear message that our streets is infested/ You gonna regret it, packin’ them tools and runnin wit fools you messed wit/ How you gonna chase dreams and greens when yo @ss is arrested/ Check it, there’s always ah biggah man ta stand where you stand/ Play yo hand, make that grand and set life to ah new plan/ I’m through wit these shoes, through wit the blues/ Through wit reading about who win or lose in da news/6/12/03 Why must I be black ta rap, white to be a politician/ Why must I be dissin when I throw in constructive criticism/ Part of lyricism is elevatin yo rhythm through mental mechanism/ Is Um?..yall wit me, then hit me wit some words of wisdom/ Brindalpitt says I sound like ah preacher, I’m just tryin’ ta reach ya/ Follow yo teacher, play sports on da court or remain on da bleachers/ On ah global radius, show who’s the graviest, no ratin’ this/ Come mo Explicit than Lady is, handle biz and blow yo Alias (What up Ex)/ From experience, any beef I ain’t hearin’ it, homie bury it/ Don’t’ be scary kid, or you’ll be bleedin from yo eyelids like Mary did/ Success cums hard like inmates… living ten years within gates/ You wanna control fate, change yo mind-state ta Bill Gates/ See I’m hungry ta bust, so I rap everyday except Christmas/ Seems like that’s the only day that ever seem ta missed us/ Check da blistahs, I’m hard at work tryin’ paint ah perfect picture/ Aim at getting’ richer, before reality it hit cha wit’ah Mark that says “Quitah”/6/13/03 |
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06-16-03, 04:59 PM | #2 | ||||||
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uppin for comments
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06-16-03, 05:24 PM | #3 | ||||||
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This piece was true...flowin has no color, I think anyone no matter their race can flow..This was a hot piece...you definitely not a newbie..you got skill
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06-16-03, 05:35 PM | #4 | ||||||
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Bmack
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thanks for the comments bmack, yeah I've been spittin since 94
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06-17-03, 12:43 PM | #5 | ||||||
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uppin
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uppin for comments
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06-17-03, 03:35 PM | #6 | ||||||
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What up dawg, Can't nobody show some love/hate?
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06-17-03, 03:39 PM | #7 | |||||||
shit is just too easy.
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Damn Dawg...This Was Tight As Hell...Like Bmack Sed This Whole Verse Is True...Keep Flippin The Script Man
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06-17-03, 03:48 PM | #8 | ||||||
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Good lookin out
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Thanks Trauma, thanks for taking your time to read/comment on my piece. Let me know if you want my opinion on anything.
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06-17-03, 03:51 PM | #9 | |||||||
shit is just too easy.
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If You Will...Gimme Sum Feedback On "What's The Difference ?"
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06-17-03, 05:28 PM | #10 | ||||||
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IP: 8D9A CCBF
I left a comment on your post.
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06-17-03, 08:07 PM | #11 | ||||||
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uppin
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06-17-03, 10:35 PM | #12 | ||||||
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i can tell u aint a new b like me, shit had skillz n talentz, repsect what ya doin man some more good shit in here
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06-17-03, 10:35 PM | #13 | ||||||
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sound like a bitta of a faggot i think seriously good piece but
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06-18-03, 12:53 PM | #14 | ||||||
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Chutney: How does the lyrics make me sound like ah faggot?
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