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Old 06-25-03, 04:52 PM   #1
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Soliloquoy of Dissonance

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This is the result of staying up for three days in a row with no sleep, I don't know what happened

A woman stands with a bird on her shoulder
The woman is a puddle of melted ice cream,
The bird is the Eiffel tower.
The melted icecream is the number 5
The eiffel tower is a failed parachute.

The numer 5 is an unexpected pothole,
the failed parachute is a drunk driver,
the pothole is the overturned car
the drunk driver is the beer dripping to the ceiling

The overturned car is the desk,
the drippin beer is the disgruntled employee
the desk is the burning mach,
the disgruntled employee is the gas soaked carpet
the burning match is the smoldering wreckage
the gas soaked carpet is Jack's smirking revenge.

the smoldering wreckage is the innocance of youth
Jack's smirking revenge is the experience of age.
The innocance of youth is the one drink to many,
the experience of age is the unleashed violence
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Old 06-25-03, 06:07 PM   #2
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alright alright....good ish

but i tried reading it for 4 times and i still dont get it..but sometimes its good..i mean the words are incredible and like how u see things as a different perspective...

like you see an overtuned car as a desk..it seems pretty interesting to me...but for some reason it has a deeper meaning than what i think...

the abstract of ur poem is really good...

keep droppin!
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