Yo, y'all couldn't SNAP up a DEAL if playin CARDS with ALLIGATORS
I'm so lively on the mic its like i was created by animators
Slappin haters thinkin they rappin greater than the Juiced
On the whole I control "souls" like a shop sellin FISH SHOES
I write my issues on tissues - still cant be RIPPED
I'm a waiter in a strip club - so HOTLY TIPPED
I got this shit, locked like a FLYS DOOR KEY
People adorn me with hinges the way they ADORE ME
I'm corking, extorting raw things so dirty they naughty
I'll be forty boarded up ignored behaviour appalling
Never stalling, I'm ongoing like Friday the 13th movies
Unlucky for you with your Army tryna shoot me
I DODGE VIPERS with Snipers on the Wipers
Your SHIT couldn't be more childish if it came from ya DIAPERS
You a baby on a lady - all u do is suck
So basic that u maybe - so WACK u be a DUCK
I ruffle ya feathers - drop an anvil on ya head
RIPPED IN PIECES is engraved on ya grave when u dead
I piss on MC's when they think they wet the bed
I COME with more ACTION than a HONEYMOON MATRESS - enough said!


Lil summat i just wrote. Tell me what ya think. Preciate it. Peace.

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I wasn't really felling this, you had basic rhyming scheme, try to add multis, and some more complex vocab, also: have a subject to rap about, it makes it more interesting for catz to read!

keep elevatin'