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Old 06-23-03, 06:26 PM   #1
Verbatim
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she left me, i'm all alone
it came out of no where, like a cyclone
i wish i could take back all those things i said
but i can't, so i'm here posting on this thread
with all this comotion, why do i feel so wrong
can't show emotion, gotta be strong
i know somehow, this was all my fault
wish i were locked away, in a lead vault
i can never do anything right
inside of me, anger always seems to ignite
always trying hold it back
sometimes i just can't, and i gotta attack
hurting people that i don't want to
causing carnage, always scared of what i'll do



again it's short, but whatever
say what ya want
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Old 06-23-03, 07:25 PM   #2
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the rhyme's were tight, length was fine, rythm was good too keep up the good work

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Old 06-23-03, 08:26 PM   #3
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thanks
come on peeps
keep uppin
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