Yo ...this one of my recent shit i wrote




Imagine that it's dark gurl...the air is cold, and the heat is between us//
Our breath float slowly...finally will this moment just free us?
Im nervous, Your shakin, Is this lust laying in the midst of night?
Say it isn't so, or Do we have love being born in its blissful right?//
Please explain this simple plight, While I caress your face softly//
hearts racing, I know you felt the beat skip when laced promptly//
Pullin you closer ensuring comfort,Closing my eyes to capture this
your touch is unparallel...So close that I can taste the angels kiss
How can I manage this, When my heart belongs to yet another?
Morale hovers extreme,The reaction is magnetic, yet I try to stop
the devil is prancing, Im losing innocence as she designs this plot
our lives are caught, in eutero, so Where do we go from here?
Love's curiousity intertwined, My soul burns, for the force is fierce
bittersweet are the thorns of the rose, Bleeding without a course of tears
Our moment nears, emotions explode, as both our lips embrace
passion, Ecstasy replaced Cupid's footprints, for he left no trace
compelled by darkness, The pot was stirred, I stood no chance
I guess Eve's blood is hereditary, I just commiting a SIN OF A MAN!

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That was nice.........


Pullin you closer ensuring comfort,Closing my eyes to capture this
your touch is unparallel...So close that I can taste the angels kiss
How can I manage this, When my heart belongs to yet another?

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I thought that part stood out.......good drop. Keep writin'.....

LOL Good poam an shit but in ur thread tupac's picture stands out mroe then ur poam man... (just kidding)

LOOOOOOOOOOOOL AIght thanks for the feedbacks


UPPUN

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that was hot, i was feelin it, i had to read it a couple times to actually feel where you were comin from , but overall that was some hott shit

^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^THNX Ma.....


UPPUN

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ey o ey o ey o

yo kid that was some dope stuff ... keep spytin cause its ya niche..holla at me kid

fashow - nice drop

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pretty amazing!....

that was damn!....i really liked how the way u just put on things in there...more like "whoa!" lol

the content was very strong and the flow was definitely perfect...

like this ruth...loved it actually!

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<br><br><center>- Shiznit -
- Tampons are still expensive -
- That's a Fact - </center>

^^^^WOW...lol i dont see shiz sayin this alot....to anyone..lol i feel special

Thanks whoever peeped it.....i apreciate it....am not really good at poems like i am on freestyle but to me....they kinda close....feel me


Anyhow UPPUN

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this was really good, your vocabulary was definately exceptional and the way you presented the thoughts was definately complex. Keep up this shit fam.