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06-21-03, 07:22 PM | #1 | ||||||
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All About Me
IP: 965F B19F
Im the norman bates of hip hop,ima serial hit maker//
and wen theres bitches tryin to hate at me,ima serious back braker// stock brocker of rhymes,that means i got a lot of flows to shock-and-rock ya// im the most buzz'ifying thing that hit Pac's fans since Big's "who shot ya"// i let my verbals knock-and-rot ya,to sock-and-knock ya eye balls out// i eat ya iris like a fat kid with lots of cash and bison snout// so get ya pensils out,its time to practice since im on the stage// my rhymes are biblical to the people,so yall shud write me a brand new page// fill hearts with rage since im the illest,plus i can murder within 5 bars// some say i strike like the virus polio,some say im like the virus SARS// complete my time up in the lab since i only pay-my-way with the ghettos paper// so yall remember as the blud whos like the fuckin serial hit creator// yo i know its prety short....but what the fuck....its only a TINY sumthin....what yall think...?? |
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06-22-03, 01:47 AM | #2 | |||||||
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IP: A086 F184
Its Tight for A Newbie , But U need too Up Ur Vocab
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06-22-03, 03:07 AM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: A476 6362
i wasnt feelign the flow but some of it was aiight. Need to up vocab
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06-22-03, 07:12 AM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 6592 2BD0
this was tight, especially for a newb.... the flow as o.k, but nuttin special...the wordplay was ill... this line was tight:
"my rhymes are biblical to the people,so yall shud write me a brand new page//"..lol keep it up dawg! |
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06-22-03, 08:05 AM | #5 | |||||||
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IP: C22E FA17
yeh for a newbie this was very good. nice worplay bible line was ace howeva theline i wasnt felling was the polio/sars line, flow was good, vocab was aight could be upped, your mos def ill for anewbie keep writing for sure
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06-22-03, 11:08 AM | #6 | |||||||
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IP: 1B6B AD68
^ Hey MRB, this is the guy thats doing Kidderminster with me!
Nice to see you here big, this was pretty straight, nice wordplay, flow was hard to catch but i suppose it fits over whatever beat you wrote this to, some nice lines, the bible one was easily the standout. Not a bad drop my man, could of made it longer i felt and developed it more. Not a bad piece though. Good going! |
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06-22-03, 12:07 PM | #7 | |||||||
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IP: C22E FA17
yo cam lad when u doing kiddy? i mite pop over there for da day to see wooshy then go and watch u wid him
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06-22-03, 12:16 PM | #8 | ||||||
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IP: AF01 3E93
i liked dat shit
it was good for a newb |
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06-23-03, 12:45 PM | #9 | ||||||
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IP: 2E1A 8296
'yo....i didnt have a beat or nuthin....jus came to me Cam....anyway....up my vocab,,,? how the fuck do i do that...??
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06-23-03, 02:53 PM | #10 | |||||||
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IP: 4C6F 6512
^ Read the dictionary my laddo!
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06-25-03, 12:27 PM | #11 | ||||||
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IP: DF45 9C15
yeah but what excactly do i do....?? what parts and shit....do i read all the A's....and move on...??
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06-25-03, 12:52 PM | #12 | ||||||
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IP: B9BB 8145
no my man, lol, just use bigger words, try linkin em together n c how u do! oh by the way that was tight dawg especially 4 a newb! KEEP IT up--- bible line was ill, 4real!
check my shit in open mic n giv sum feed bac y'all, thanx! |
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