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Old 06-29-03, 01:50 AM   #1
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This is a flow, im pissed at suicidal people.

Look im here to give it to you straight, life is a bitch, some people love some people hate, some people die, some people cry, some people feel pathetic, some people actually kill themselves, talking bout death, like they met it, but they just sweat it , when they hold up the gun, they back off,they tell their parents they just do it for fun, but in the long run, it all balls up inside like an explosive device, an implosion from your heart,is all it takes to break up the ice, it just takes just one wrong word from a certain stranger, and then BOOM, like a sheep, they drift, from their own manger, that manger is reality, something that they think doesnt exist, their mind screams "the only answer is fatality", but kids ignorance is bliss, so the next time your up on the dime, life has treated you rough , or you just cant find a reason to live, a reason to trust anyone in the world, like everyone is against you, think about it, does it really make sense to? pull the trigger and leave everyone behind? think of all the lives, the things youll change and cause in time, this decision aint mine, its all in your hands, think about it, look foward to the future, make new plans, get real about it.
Life will get better, so dont worry, it might not be better tommorow, it wont hurry, but evade all of the sadness and sorrow that you will cause, to your friends and your family, so with the power invested in me, and jesus christ, take my advice, put down the gun, go out live your life, and have some fun.

Ive been through alot of crap in my life, and everyday i wake up and yawn, i thank the Lord for letting me live another day.

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The only answer is God.
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Old 06-29-03, 06:51 AM   #2
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I like this but it would make the piece a whole lot easier to read if you seperated the lines and gave it some structure ya know...you send the message across well you just need that and you good cause right now it's all cramped together
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Old 06-29-03, 09:23 AM   #3
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^^word^^

I gave up tryin to read it about 2/5 of the way through, take a new line for each line, helps catz read it more and they will give you more beneficial analysis, you know?
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Old 06-29-03, 04:19 PM   #4
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iite man next time i will
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