Fuck you mister homeless man
Even you cant comprehend my hopelessness
Forever waiting for the rising of the locustses
Nothing says biblical like looking for lost meaning
Sponsored by subliminal vision all the while not seeing
6 billion people trapped within the open door not fleeing
5 million martyrs left unfilled by just being "me"
4 thousand sinners snickering while praying to their deity
3 hundred work a day drones suprised by general spontaneity
2 lottery winners clutching like lingerie ads to the tickets that theyve won
1 student simply sitting staring directly into the sun
Which of these subsets should be the most thankful of what theyve become
Id say it is 0 because he sits at the bottom ideally dreaming looking up

i liked it, had nice flow n it was plain ol good i like yo work not much tha i said but hey

read this plz

I felt like giving this a title would only shortchange what directions it could have gone in, So i just went with the first line. I also figured it would be an eye catcher, im not trying to offend anyone.

check this out!

U got good shit m8 i lik it tight verse m8

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that would deff get my vote

I like the approach you took. And you didn't fook it up.

I dug a bit, but a bit sleepy right now, so not too much. It was a good piece. A fairly hard hitting depiction of the directionless person. Especially the student? Thoughts were put down pretty well.

I dunno, that's what i got out of it. MAybe i'll come back later and dig some more. Actually, if you can, tell what you were writing about. I got my basic meaning. Got some other theories, but as i said, sleepy so can't go over them.

A good piece, for what it was.

...resp...

Thanks for the compliments varentao, im going to wait for a few more people to give their interpretations before I give my own, I don't want to sway anyones intial responses, Im curious to the approach your taking as well. Digging is encouraged. PEACE

damn good piece!My meaning of it seems that we all have a sense of direction some positive the other negative,funny how we never know how it all ends. peace!

~Breakdown Of Content...Make Me A Mod Comittee~

Homless People Make me Angry Because
If They Can Take The Time To Stand At A
Gas Station And Be Annoying Asking Everyone
For Money They Could Direct That Time Before
A Human Resourses Center To Get A Job As A
Food Server In A Hotel Or Sommit..At Least She
Would Have A Legit Meal....

Your Topic Was Eye Catching And The Way You
Branched Out For It Represented Your Creativity

^^Oh shite, yeah. I ignored the homeless man part. It seems so much more obvious now *smacks head*. Good looking out Content.