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How did I lose this battle?
IP: 5A06 B027
I battled this dude, MoRbId, yesterday and I lost. I don't know why. Can someone tell me what's wrong with my verse? Here...
MoRbId, you sound like a poor kid I should send your fuckin ass back to abortion before I rip you up into tiny little portions and grill you up so your momma could eat you up like horse shit My rhymes are so raw once I spit them in your mouth it'll taste like medicine giving your skin a 2nd degree burn to disintegrate your skeleton like a Salmonella virus leering at your organs and meltin[infectin] 'em just like how I fucked up each of your relatives You look scared as fuck as if I threatened you like I'd beat your ass down in Maine You can't relate to my shit, and have no one to blame cuz when I win this battle you'll be doing the "Walk of Shame" Fuck it, I already know your gonna choke before you say what you say So spit motherfucker, so I could be the victor of this game |
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IP: 5A06 B027
and this is his verse.
Just some advice MC-Viet join a label. ‘Cas you’ll just get fired,// You suck like your retired, wait…fuck retired,// Your fuckin’ retarded! Just because you started.// And know wut? Your shit stinks! At first I thought someone farted.// Me battlin you has no point, like a broken pencil.// Battlin fags like you who spit weak shit is so un-suspenseful.// And you’re only a stupid kid,// Trying to get high of the dope that I already did.// U know it’s me that you can’t beat,// The only way u could win against me is if you cheat.// And u better go give a vote for yourself hun,// ‘Cas that’s the ONLY way u could possibly get one!// Now, all I have left say is, “I want you to fuck me bitch!” // Yeah, just so I can give u AIDS, herpes, and make ur dick itch…// |
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BANNED for biting
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IP: E22A E76C
This thread belongs in Whackness Emergency Center...............
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IP: 5A06 B027
Did my shit sound too basic or is it because I spit first? Well anywayz, uppin for some feedback...
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IP: E22A E76C
O-M-G.................... This forum is for Open Mics only...........................This thread belongs in WHACKNESS EMERGENCY CENTER!!!!
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Got More Meds Than Pfizer
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IP: CDB3 B6BF
lol.. you tell him bash... and that was wack,,, I'll help you out a bit... instead of just rhyming words randomly that sound cool together try and formulate a plot to it...
MoRbId, you sound like a poor kid << - you could play off this line I should send your fuckin ass back to abortion<<- But didn't before I rip you up into tiny little portions [b]^how could you rip him into portions after he's already been aborted... and grill you up so your momma could eat you up like horse shit ^his mom eats horse shit? My rhymes are so raw once I spit them in your mouth it'll taste like medicinemedicine isn't raw, it's lots of chemicals together that form one super chemical;.. .... if you can't see a problem with those lines you need serious help.. they barely even flowed.. not try'n to put a downer on your day, but work on it... here's what I would've done.. MoRbId, you sound like a poor kid killin' this baby like a pre-natal abortion cut up tha fetus in-ta tiny little portions grill it an' feed-it to ya momma before sex... My rhymes so raw I spit them I spit-m like medicen....
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hell yea^^^^^^^^^
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