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Old 06-27-03, 06:11 PM   #1
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Evening Star

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It was the late summer,
And mid-time of night;
And stars, in their orbits,
Shone pale, throwing light
Of the brighter, cold moon,
The planets her slaves,
Herself in the Heavens,
Her beam on the waves.
I gazed awhile
On her cold smile;
Too cold, too cold for me
There pass'd, as a shroud,
A fleecy cloud,
And I turned away to see,
Proud Evening Star,
In your glory afar,
And dearer her beam shall be;
For joy to my heart
Is the proud part
You shine in Heaven at night,
And more I admire
Your distant fire,
Than that colder, lowly light
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Old 06-27-03, 06:16 PM   #2
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alright...arachibutyrophobic...*ahem* i mean deceit.....this was a nice one to read...it released a very aura of ur inner child...its really interesting how that happens...and its a great feeling too...

this piece didnt have anything much on it besides the fact that ur amused by something so high...well...the simplistic vibe got me to like it...

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Old 06-27-03, 07:59 PM   #3
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A very nicely done piece.

Such great imagery, and flowed effortlessly. Really bought me into it in a qaint and personal way...i dig it for sure.

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I'll leave it up to Shiznit to close one of your threads. And then re-open and up them once you have NOT got MORE THAN THREE threads on the first page.

No criticism of you. The rule has only been put up about 5 mins ago. And we don't have much rules on here.
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Old 06-28-03, 03:28 AM   #4
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nice piece, i really love the stars n shit i dunno its just a relaxin thing to look at, plus my boi proposed to me one nite sittin on the hood of his car watchin the stars n shit, so u kno i was feelin this, nice piece thou,
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Old 06-30-03, 03:18 PM   #5
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YOU ARE SILLY AND HAVE A SMALL WILLLY! Now THAT'S poetry.

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To put it more simply. I, 'fine_fellow', am silly and have a small willy. I find it so poetic...

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Old 06-30-03, 11:34 PM   #6
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The description you had going was really good. I liked reading this. Kinda simple but to the point. Lines were short but you did good with putting a lot of imagery in it. Good job.
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Old 07-02-03, 05:32 PM   #7
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If you varentao are so and petty that you interfere with other people's posts and get involed in disagreements between two honourable young men then I can only assume that you had a rather difficult upbringing. If you would be willing I could recommend some first class counselors who could ammend your personality disfunctions in no time. Would you be willing or, as most of you angry young chaps is your reckless pride too great to admit that you have a problem and I am the only person who could put you back on the straight and narrow?
P.S you are a belligerent sodomite.
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Old 07-03-03, 04:17 PM   #8
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hey deceit you jewish scallywag. s'up
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Old 07-03-03, 04:21 PM   #9
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And you are fucking insane to put it simply, or if you want it to include big words, your anti-erratic and unconstitutional behaviour displays many established bureaucratic veiws suggesting you are an upper-class snob with too much time on your spindly little hands and have most predictably not worked a day in your life, the only thing you have earned is probably an orgasm from overt and excessive masturbation so take your contradictory, somniferous not to mention plain authoritarian ,though recent tests may not show so, veiws elsewhere.
To put it simply once again, your fucking insane, and quite stupid!
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Old 07-03-03, 04:22 PM   #10
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I'm good, you?
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Old 07-03-03, 04:24 PM   #11
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yeah well... I can use big words too... you're gayificated. SEE!
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Old 07-03-03, 04:25 PM   #12
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So do you want to go to a rap forum? or do you want a private battle between me and you?
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Old 07-03-03, 04:25 PM   #13
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how do you send PM(s)
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Old 07-03-03, 04:27 PM   #14
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go to user CP at the top of the page, look for something that says new pm in about the middle below the inbox and write my name in, Deceit, then whatever you want to say, and you have to include a subject...
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Old 07-03-03, 04:29 PM   #15
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ooh let's do a private battle. Yay I'm gay. see good start
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